App— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不够自然的问题，例如“Walls app I recently use with a platform”不符合英语习惯。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和表达方式，同时避免冗余。

예시: Recently, I have been using an app called Xian Yu, which is a popular platform for buying and selling second-hand items among young people. It offers a wide range of products, from phones and cameras to unique items.

제안: 回答中有重复词汇“track track”，且表达略显重复。建议避免重复，使用连接词使句子更流畅，同时丰富词汇表达。

예시: I usually prefer apps that monitor my health. For instance, the Health app on my iPhone helps me track my sleep quality, which I find very useful and convenient, so I use it almost every day.

제안: 句子结构不完整，表达不够清晰。建议使用完整句子，注意连接词的使用，使表达更连贯自然。

예시: I usually discover new apps through videos on social media. For example, when celebrities recommend apps, I become interested and often download them to try.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，如“will be self will be efficient”。建议简化句子，使用正确的语法，并提供具体理由。

예시: In the future, I would like to use more AI-based apps, such as DeepSeek or ChatGPT, because they can help me save a lot of time when researching information.

× Walls app I recently use with a platform that sells different second hand items which called Xian Yu and it's very popular to apps among young generations because you can buy anything from it, not only second hand phones or cameras but also some abstract items.

✓ Walls app I recently use is a platform that sells different second hand items called Xian Yu and it's very popular among young generations because you can buy anything from it, not only second hand phones or cameras but also some abstract items.

句中缺少系动词“is”，导致句子结构不完整。"which called Xian Yu"应改为"called Xian Yu"，作为定语修饰前面的名词。"popular to apps"应改为"popular among young generations"，表达更准确。

× Well, usually I prefer to use apps that can track track my healthy level.

✓ Well, usually I prefer to use apps that can track my health level.

"track track"重复，应删除一个。"healthy level"表达不准确，应改为"health level"。

× For example, the house app in my iPhone, which is very useful and convenient to track my sleep quality.

✓ For example, the Health app on my iPhone, which is very useful and convenient for tracking my sleep quality.

"house app"应为"Health app"，是应用名称。"in my iPhone"应改为"on my iPhone"，表示设备上的应用。"convenient to track"应改为"convenient for tracking"，符合习惯用法。

× Well, I usually find different apps on the videos.

✓ Well, I usually find different apps through videos.

"on the videos"用法不当，应改为"through videos"，表示通过视频获取信息。

× For example some celebrities on social media will recommend different apps to the audience and sometimes which makes me very interested and I will download it and to try it.

✓ For example, some celebrities on social media will recommend different apps to the audience, and sometimes that makes me very interested and I will download and try them.

"which"指代不明确，应改为"that"。"download it and to try it"结构不正确，应改为"download and try them"，保持一致的复数形式。

× Well I think I'll download more apps based on the artificial intelligence, for example the DeepSeek or ChatGPT.

✓ Well, I think I'll download more apps based on artificial intelligence, for example DeepSeek or ChatGPT.

"the artificial intelligence"中冠词"the"不必要，应去掉。应用名称前不需要冠词。

× Because I think the apps use the AI will be self will be efficient.

✓ Because I think apps that use AI will be more efficient.

句子结构混乱，"the apps use the AI will be self will be efficient"不通顺，应改为"apps that use AI will be more efficient"。

× For example when you use these kind of apps you can save lots of time of research.

✓ For example, when you use these kinds of apps, you can save lots of research time.

"these kind of apps"应为复数形式"these kinds of apps"。"save lots of time of research"表达不自然，应改为"save lots of research time"。