App— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy like repeating 'Amazon' and improve sentence flow by linking ideas. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary and correct article usage (e.g., 'an application').

예시: I use many apps daily, especially fitness ones when I go to the gym. Recently, I used the Amazon app to order a pair of shoes online.

제안: Your answer has some grammar errors and redundancy, such as 'which I used which I use'. Try to structure your sentences more clearly and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be careful with article usage ('an application').

예시: I am mainly interested in fitness apps, such as the '30 Days Challenge' app that I use at the gym to guide my workouts. Besides that, I also enjoy shopping apps like Amazon.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating phrases like 'a lot' and improve sentence flow by combining sentences with linking words. Also, use plural forms correctly ('advertisements').

예시: I discover new apps in various ways, but the most reliable method for me is through advertisements on Instagram since I use it frequently and often come across app promotions there.

제안: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but it can be improved by correcting grammar ('an economical way') and by using linking words to connect ideas more smoothly. Also, try to avoid repeating the same phrase ('stay fit').

예시: In the future, I would like to use fitness apps because I enjoy staying healthy. These apps are a more convenient and economical alternative to hiring a personal coach.

× But the application that I recently used was the Amazon.

✓ But the application that I recently used was Amazon.

The definite article 'the' is not needed before 'Amazon' because it is a proper noun referring to a company or website name. Using 'the' before proper nouns like company names is generally incorrect unless the name includes a common noun (e.g., 'the Amazon River').

× I remember I ordered a pair of shoes from the Amazon.com.

✓ I remember I ordered a pair of shoes from Amazon.com.

Similar to the previous sentence, 'the' is unnecessary before 'Amazon.com' because it is a proper noun representing a website. Omitting 'the' is the correct usage here.

× For example a application called 30 Days Apps Challenge which I used which I use in my gym to do my exercise and apart from that I also like shopping applications like Amazon.

✓ For example, an application called 30 Days Apps Challenge which I use in my gym to do my exercise, and apart from that, I also like shopping applications like Amazon.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound as in 'application'. Also, the phrase 'which I used which I use' is redundant and confusing; it should be simplified to 'which I use' to maintain present tense consistency. Commas are added for clarity.

× One of the most reliable and most preferable way is through advertisement on Instagram.

✓ One of the most reliable and most preferable ways is through advertisements on Instagram.

The noun 'way' should be plural 'ways' because it is preceded by 'one of the'. Also, 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match the context of multiple ads on Instagram.

× Because I use Instagram a lot, I came across a lot of applications through the advertisement.

✓ Because I use Instagram a lot, I come across a lot of applications through advertisements.

The verb tense should be present 'come' to match 'use' and the habitual action. Also, 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to reflect multiple ads encountered.

× In the future, I would like to use applications related to fitness because I like to stay fit and these applications are more convenient and economical way to stay fit rather than hiring a personal coach.

✓ In the future, I would like to use applications related to fitness because I like to stay fit and these applications are a more convenient and economical way to stay fit rather than hiring a personal coach.

The phrase 'more convenient and economical way' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it because 'way' is a singular countable noun.