App— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答有些重复和语法错误，建议简洁明了地表达观点，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。例如，可以先直接回答问题，然后用具体细节支持。

예시: Recently, I have been using TikTok a lot. I watch funny videos and K-pop clips to relax during my free time, which helps me feel refreshed.

제안: 回答中表达不够清晰，语法和词汇使用有误。建议直接回答问题，使用正确的句子结构，并提供具体细节。

예시: I am usually interested in second-hand selling apps like Shen Yu Juan Juan. I use them to sell items I no longer need, which I enjoy doing as a seller.

제안: 回答不够连贯，语法错误较多。建议先直接回答问题，然后用连接词补充细节，表达清晰且具体。

예시: I usually find new apps on the Internet or through recommendations from my parents and friends. When they suggest a fun app, I like to try it and use it regularly.

제안: 回答不完整且表达不清晰。建议明确表达未来想用的应用类型，并说明原因，使用连贯的句子。

예시: In the future, I would like to use apps related to psychology because I want to study this field. I am also interested in law, so legal apps might be useful for me.

× I always watch the video, relax myself and I always watch the funny video and you know the the video about K pop.

✓ I always watch videos, relax myself, and I always watch funny videos, you know, the videos about K-pop.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'the video' when referring to multiple videos, which is a singular/plural issue (ID 1). Also, the sentence structure is a bit awkward. Correcting to plural 'videos' and adding commas improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I think it's the second hands up like Shen Yu Juan Juan.

✓ I think it's the second-hand app like Shen Yu Juan Juan.

'Second hands up' is incorrect; it should be 'second-hand app' to correctly describe a type of app. This is a singular/plural and word choice issue (ID 1).

× I often use it to sell the things what I don't really want to use it.

✓ I often use it to sell things that I don't really want to use.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'what' instead of 'that' and redundantly uses 'it' at the end. This is an incorrect pronoun use (ID 12). Removing the redundant 'it' and replacing 'what' with 'that' corrects the sentence.

× Maybe it's on Internet or my parent me and even my friend was telling me an A funny apps and even I think this app is really funny and I really want to diving in it.

✓ Maybe it's on the Internet or my parents, me, and even my friend were telling me about a funny app, and I think this app is really funny and I really want to dive into it.

Several pronoun and article errors: 'on Internet' should be 'on the Internet' (article error, ID 22), 'parent me' is unclear and corrected to 'parents, me,'; 'was' should be 'were' for plural subject (subject-verb agreement, ID 27); 'an A funny apps' should be 'a funny app' (article and singular/plural issue, IDs 22 and 1); 'want to diving in it' should be 'want to dive into it' (verb + -ing form error, ID 8, and preposition error, ID 11).

× Frankly, speak, I'm not for sure, but I think it's about it's about psychological 'cause you know, in the future I want to be a people, a person who studied about psychological and and I'm also want to be a lawyer, but I think it's about.

✓ Frankly speaking, I'm not sure, but I think it's about psychology because, you know, in the future I want to be a person who studies psychology, and I also want to be a lawyer, but I think it's about that.

Multiple errors: 'Frankly, speak' should be 'Frankly speaking' (verb + -ing form, ID 8); 'I'm not for sure' should be 'I'm not sure' (incorrect modal verb usage, ID 4); 'a people' is incorrect, should be 'a person' (singular/plural issue, ID 1); 'studied about psychological' should be 'studies psychology' (verb tense and preposition errors, IDs 5 and 11); 'I'm also want' should be 'I also want' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27).