App— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific examples of what you discuss on the app.

예시: I use WeChat every day to chat with my mother and friends. It helps us stay close, and we often share interesting stories or news, which makes our conversations enjoyable.

제안: Avoid unnecessary phrases like 'Wow, this is an interesting question.' Focus on directly answering the question with clear topic sentences and specific details. Use linking words to organise your ideas logically.

예시: I usually enjoy music and podcast apps, like the Chinese app Story, because they are practical and help me learn new things while relaxing.

제안: Improve clarity by using correct grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about how you discover apps online and through friends' recommendations.

예시: I usually find new apps by browsing posts on the Internet that showcase different applications and their features. Also, my friends often recommend useful apps to me.

제안: Make your answer more natural by correcting grammar and avoiding repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons why you want to use these apps.

예시: In the future, I would like to use sports and reading apps because they are convenient and can help me stay fit and develop a regular reading habit.

× Well, every day I will use the WeChat, which is the Chinese app, and I often use it to communicate with my mother and my friends.

✓ Well, every day I use WeChat, which is a Chinese app, and I often use it to communicate with my mother and my friends.

The use of 'will' to express habitual actions is incorrect here. In English, the simple present tense is used to describe habitual or regular actions. Therefore, 'I will use' should be corrected to 'I use'. Also, 'the WeChat' is incorrect because app names generally do not take the definite article 'the'.

× Well, every day I will use the WeChat, which is the Chinese app, and I often use it to communicate with my mother and my friends.

✓ Well, every day I use WeChat, which is a Chinese app, and I often use it to communicate with my mother and my friends.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'WeChat' and 'Chinese app'. Proper nouns like app names usually do not require 'the'. Also, 'the Chinese app' implies a specific app, but here it should be 'a Chinese app' to indicate one among many.

× Additionally, it's very convenient for us to build the strong bond and we can also talk something interesting.

✓ Additionally, it's very convenient for us to build a strong bond and we can also talk about something interesting.

The phrase 'talk something interesting' is incorrect because 'talk' requires the preposition 'about' when referring to topics. Also, 'the strong bond' should be 'a strong bond' as it is not a specific bond previously mentioned.

× In my routine life, I often use the music apps and listening apps such as the podcast and the night Music in Chinese app Story, and I think it's very useful and practical for my life.

✓ In my daily life, I often use music apps and listening apps such as podcasts and the night music app 'Story' in Chinese, and I think they're very useful and practical for my life.

'Music apps' and 'listening apps' are plural, so 'the podcast' should be pluralized to 'podcasts' to match. Also, 'night Music' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun; here it seems to be part of an app name, so it is clarified. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correct plural usage.

× I can admire so many things.

✓ I can enjoy so many things.

The verb 'admire' is not typically used with 'things' in this context. 'Enjoy' is more appropriate when referring to appreciating content from apps.

× Well, most of time are when I was on the Internet and there are so many posts which is which display the different apps.

✓ Well, most of the time when I am on the Internet, there are many posts that display different apps.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and verb agreement. 'Most of time are when I was' is incorrect; it should be 'most of the time when I am'. Also, 'posts which is which display' is incorrect; it should be 'posts that display'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× there are so many posts which is which display the different apps.

✓ there are so many posts which display different apps.

The relative clause 'which is which display' is incorrect. The verb should agree with the plural noun 'posts', so 'which display' is correct.

× Additionally my friends will recommend some apps for me.

✓ Additionally, my friends will recommend some apps to me.

The verb 'recommend' is followed by 'to' when indicating the person receiving the recommendation. Therefore, 'recommend some apps for me' should be 'recommend some apps to me'.

× Well, in the future I will try some sports apps and some reading apps which is powerful and and very accessible in my routine life.

✓ Well, in the future I will try some sports apps and some reading apps which are powerful and very accessible in my daily life.

'Which is' should be 'which are' to agree with the plural subject 'apps'. Also, 'routine life' is better expressed as 'daily life'. The double 'and' is a typographical error and corrected.

× which is powerful and and very accessible in my routine life.

✓ which are powerful and very accessible in my daily life.

The repeated 'and' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'and'. Also, 'which is' should be 'which are' to agree with the plural noun 'apps'.

× Additionally, I hope that I can do some sports to keep fit and also have a habit to read some books.

✓ Additionally, I hope that I can do some sports to keep fit and also develop a habit of reading some books.

The phrase 'have a habit to read' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'develop a habit of reading'. Also, 'do some sports' is acceptable but 'play some sports' or 'engage in some sports' might be more natural.