App— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答有些语法错误，表达不够自然，且信息有些混乱。建议你直接回答问题，使用完整句子，并避免提及政治敏感内容。可以用更清晰的句子结构和连接词来表达。

예시: Recently, I have been using a popular Chinese social media app that many people around the world enjoy. It has interesting features that keep me engaged.

제안: 回答中有语法错误，如“prevents me to do”应为“prevents me from doing”。建议你用更自然的表达，避免口语填充词“Uh”，并且用连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: I am usually interested in electronic reading apps because they help me learn. However, I often use social networking apps, which can distract me from real-life activities.

제안: 回答中信息不够具体，且提到的OneNote不是社交软件，容易引起混淆。建议你用更准确的词汇，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

예시: I usually discover new apps through advertisements on social media platforms like Instagram. Also, friends often recommend useful apps to me.

제안: 回答有些重复，且句子结构不够紧凑。建议你合并句子，使用连接词，并且表达更具体的计划。

예시: In the future, I would like to use apps that help me manage my schedule and improve my work and study efficiency. At the same time, I plan to reduce my use of social media apps to avoid distractions.

× I'm using right now very frequently.

✓ I am using it very frequently right now.

The original sentence lacks the object 'it' after 'using' and has an awkward word order. Adding 'it' clarifies the object, and placing 'right now' at the end improves natural English word order.

× Recently it is a Chinese social media website which is become more and more popular over the whole world since Tiktok was banned by Trump government.

✓ Recently, it is a Chinese social media website which has become more and more popular all over the world since TikTok was banned by the Trump government.

The phrase 'is become' is incorrect; the present perfect tense 'has become' should be used to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present. Also, 'over the whole world' is better expressed as 'all over the world'. The definite article 'the' is needed before 'Trump government'.

× Uh, if I can control, I want to use some electronic reading apps more, but in fact I use some social networking apps frequently.

✓ Uh, if I could control it, I would want to use some electronic reading apps more, but in fact, I use some social networking apps frequently.

The original sentence uses 'can' incorrectly in a hypothetical context; 'could' is appropriate for hypothetical situations. Also, 'want to use' should be in conditional form 'would want to use' to match the hypothetical mood. Adding 'it' clarifies what is being controlled.

× I think it's not a good habit because it prevents me to do things in real.

✓ I think it's not a good habit because it prevents me from doing things in real life.

The verb 'prevent' is followed by 'from' plus the gerund form of the verb. Also, 'in real' is incomplete; the correct phrase is 'in real life'.

× Well, I always download some apps because of the advertisement in some social networking websites or apps such as Instagram or OneNote.

✓ Well, I always download some apps because of advertisements on some social networking websites or apps such as Instagram or OneNote.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'on' is used for websites. Also, 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match the context.

× Some users will recommend other apps here.

✓ Some users recommend other apps here.

The modal 'will' is unnecessary here; simple present tense is more appropriate for habitual actions. No pronoun error detected, but sentence improved for naturalness.

× I want to try some. I want to try some maps which can help me to manage my schedules or improve my efficiency at work and study but reduce the use of some social networking or social media apps which will distract me from doing things.

✓ I want to try some apps. I want to try some apps that can help me manage my schedule or improve my efficiency at work and study, but reduce my use of social networking or social media apps that distract me from doing things.

The word 'maps' is likely a mistranslation or misuse; 'apps' fits better. 'Schedules' should be singular 'schedule' when referring to one's overall timetable. 'Help me to manage' is better as 'help me manage'. Also, 'reduce the use of some social networking apps' is better expressed as 'reduce my use of social networking apps'. The relative pronoun 'which' is better replaced by 'that' for restrictive clauses.