App— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: In your answer, try to use correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Also, organize your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your points. For example, mention the apps you use, then explain why you use them, using linking words like 'and' or 'especially'.

예시: Recently, I have used many apps such as Instagram, WhatsApp, Facebook, and Telegram. These apps are very secure and useful. Especially, LinkedIn is a professional app where I can connect with others in my field.

제안: Try to start with a clear topic sentence and use correct grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be specific about the types of videos you watch. Avoid incomplete sentences and repetition.

예시: I am usually interested in using Instagram because I like watching different kinds of videos, especially informative ones. Most of the time, I use this app to communicate with my friends.

제안: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Start with a topic sentence, then explain how you find apps, using linking words. Be specific about the methods you use to discover apps and avoid vague phrases.

예시: I usually find new apps by searching online or through recommendations from my friends. I look for apps that are useful for communication and provide informative videos.

제안: Try to use correct app names and grammar. Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details connected by linking words. Be specific about why you want to use the app in the future.

예시: In the future, I would like to use LinkedIn because it is a professional app where I can connect with high-level professionals. It is helpful for job searching and networking in my field of study.

× Recently I have been used many sort of apps like Instagram and WhatsApp as well Facebook and Telegram and so many like this.

✓ Recently I have used many sorts of apps like Instagram, WhatsApp, Facebook, Telegram, and many others.

The phrase 'have been used' is incorrect here because 'have been' requires a past participle to form the present perfect continuous passive, which is not the intended meaning. The correct form is 'have used' to indicate the present perfect active tense. Also, 'many sort of apps' should be 'many sorts of apps' to agree in number and preposition usage.

× Recently I have been used many sort of apps like Instagram and WhatsApp as well Facebook and Telegram and so many like this.

✓ Recently I have used many sorts of apps like Instagram, WhatsApp, Facebook, Telegram, and many others.

The phrase 'many sort of apps' is incorrect because 'many' requires a plural noun. The correct phrase is 'many sorts of apps' to match plural usage.

× Recently I have been used many sort of apps like Instagram and WhatsApp as well Facebook and Telegram and so many like this.

✓ Recently I have used many sorts of apps like Instagram, WhatsApp, Facebook, Telegram, and many others.

The conjunction 'and' is used repeatedly without proper commas or conjunctions, making the sentence confusing. Using commas and 'and' before the last item improves clarity.

× These apps are really secure, secure.

✓ These apps are really secure.

The repetition of 'secure' is unnecessary and incorrect. One use suffices to convey the meaning.

× Specially linking is the very professional app and it's a very communicated group.

✓ Especially LinkedIn is a very professional app and it has very active groups.

'Specially' should be 'especially' to mean 'particularly'. 'Linking' is likely a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'LinkedIn'. 'Communicated group' is incorrect; 'active groups' or 'well-communicated groups' would be better. Also, 'the very professional app' is incorrect; 'a very professional app' is correct.

× I myself usually interest in using the Instagram mostly like watching video on that different kind of videos and some informative video as well.

✓ I am usually interested in using Instagram, mostly watching different kinds of videos and some informative videos as well.

'I myself usually interest' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I am usually interested'. 'The Instagram' is incorrect; 'Instagram' does not need 'the'. 'Video' should be plural 'videos' to match 'different kinds'.

× I myself usually interest in using the Instagram mostly like watching video on that different kind of videos and some informative video as well.

✓ I am usually interested in using Instagram, mostly watching different kinds of videos and some informative videos as well.

The preposition 'interest in' requires the verb 'am interested in'. Also, 'watching video on that' is awkward; better to say 'watching different kinds of videos'.

× And most of the time I I use this app for communicate with friends and I like to prefer to.

✓ Most of the time, I use this app to communicate with friends, and I prefer it.

'I I' is a repetition error. 'Use this app for communicate' is incorrect; it should be 'use this app to communicate'. 'I like to prefer to' is incorrect and redundant; 'I prefer it' suffices.

× I really find out different and more useful and beneficial for me, especially when I communicate to people and to my friends and watching with the different kind of videos.

✓ I really find different apps more useful and beneficial for me, especially when I communicate with people and my friends and watch different kinds of videos.

The sentence is fragmented and lacks clarity. 'Find out different and more useful' is incorrect; it should be 'find different apps more useful'. 'Communicate to people' should be 'communicate with people'. 'Watching with the different kind of videos' is incorrect; it should be 'watch different kinds of videos'.

× I really find out different and more useful and beneficial for me, especially when I communicate to people and to my friends and watching with the different kind of videos.

✓ I really find different apps more useful and beneficial for me, especially when I communicate with people and my friends and watch different kinds of videos.

The preposition 'communicate to' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'communicate with'. Also, 'watching with' is incorrect; it should be 'watch' without 'with'.

× And there must be informative video as well for instance, since like so many.

✓ There must be informative videos as well, for instance, many of them.

'Video' should be plural 'videos' to match 'many'. The phrase 'since like so many' is unclear and incorrect; 'many of them' clarifies the meaning.

× In future, I may prefer to use the link in app very much because it's a very useful and professional link.

✓ In the future, I may prefer to use the LinkedIn app very much because it's a very useful and professional platform.

'In future' should be 'In the future'. 'Link in app' is likely 'LinkedIn app'. Also, 'link' is incorrect; 'platform' or 'app' is better.

× You can contact and meet the very professional high level people in this app and it's healthy for a very good varieties of job matching account into your field and studies as well.

✓ You can contact and meet very professional, high-level people on this app, and it is helpful for a variety of job matching opportunities in your field and studies as well.

'The very professional high level people' needs commas and hyphenation: 'very professional, high-level people'. 'Healthy' is incorrect; 'helpful' fits better. 'A very good varieties' is incorrect; 'a variety' is singular. 'Job matching account' is unclear; 'job matching opportunities' is better. 'Into your field and studies' should be 'in your field and studies'.

× You can contact and meet the very professional high level people in this app and it's healthy for a very good varieties of job matching account into your field and studies as well.

✓ You can contact and meet very professional, high-level people on this app, and it is helpful for a variety of job matching opportunities in your field and studies as well.

The preposition 'in this app' should be 'on this app' because we use 'on' for platforms or apps. Also, 'into your field' should be 'in your field'.

× It's very helpful for applying to different.

✓ It's very helpful for applying to different jobs.

The sentence is incomplete; 'different' needs a noun to complete the meaning, such as 'jobs'.