App— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by using the past tense for recent activities and avoiding redundancy. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific examples, and keep it concise within 5 sentences.

예시: Recently, I have used several apps that are part of my daily life. For example, I often use Facebook, WhatsApp, Instagram, and YouTube to stay connected and entertained.

제안: Focus on giving a clear and direct answer with proper grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific examples of the types of apps you like, such as news or social media apps, and explain why you are interested in them.

예시: I am usually interested in social media apps like Facebook and Instagram because they provide news updates and videos about global events, which help me stay informed.

제안: Improve your answer by using correct prepositions and verb tenses. Clearly explain the process of discovering new apps, and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Avoid repetition and be specific about how app stores suggest apps.

예시: I usually find new apps by browsing the Apple App Store or YouTube recommendations. These platforms suggest various apps, including games, social media, and entertainment, based on my interests.

제안: Clarify your ideas and use complete sentences to express your future preferences. Use linking words to connect your thoughts and provide specific examples of the types of apps you want to use, such as apps related to autonomous vehicles or travel assistance.

예시: In the future, I would like to use apps that support autonomous vehicles or smart transportation. For instance, apps that help control self-driving cars or provide real-time travel information would be very useful.

× I use lots of apps recently but it's apps is like part of our life and if we have a mobile service we want to use that.

✓ I have used lots of apps recently because apps are like a part of our life, and if we have mobile service, we want to use it.

The sentence incorrectly uses the simple present tense 'use' with the time expression 'recently', which requires the present perfect tense 'have used'. Also, 'it's apps is' is grammatically incorrect; 'apps' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' and the possessive 'its' should be used instead of 'it's'. Additionally, 'a mobile service' is better without 'a' if referring generally, and 'use that' should be 'use it' to refer correctly to the service.

× I use lots of apps from that such as Facebook, WhatsApp, Instagram and YouTube.

✓ I use lots of apps such as Facebook, WhatsApp, Instagram, and YouTube.

The phrase 'from that' is unnecessary and confusing here. The sentence should directly list the apps used. Also, a comma is needed before 'and' in the list for clarity.

× I interested in like race apps such as Facebook have that option also Instagram in that I guess.

✓ I am interested in apps like Facebook and Instagram that have those options, I guess.

The verb 'interested' requires the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present tense 'I am interested'. The phrase 'race apps' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'apps like Facebook and Instagram' is clearer. Also, 'have that option also Instagram in that' is ungrammatical and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× So any news video thing or like any updated from the globalization?

✓ So, any news videos or updates about globalization?

The phrase 'updated from the globalization' is incorrect; 'updates about globalization' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also, 'news video thing' is vague; 'news videos' is clearer.

× I will I will go at the YouTube App Store in the Apple Apple store.

✓ I will go to the YouTube App Store in the Apple Store.

The phrase 'go at' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'go to'. Also, 'Apple Apple store' is repetitive; it should be 'Apple Store'. Repetition of 'I will' is unnecessary.

× They suggest me a lots of ads such as games, social media and entertainment.

✓ They suggest a lot of apps such as games, social media, and entertainment to me.

The verb 'suggest' is not used with a direct object pronoun like 'me' in this way. The correct structure is 'suggest something to someone'. Also, 'a lots' is incorrect; it should be 'a lot'. 'Ads' (advertisements) is likely incorrect here; 'apps' fits better in context.

× Inclusive evolving movies, this kind of facts like we have to go in the car or bike.

✓ I am interested in inclusive evolving movies and facts related to traveling by car or bike.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It lacks a clear subject and verb structure. The correction provides a complete sentence with proper subject-verb agreement and clearer meaning.

× So they give give us like something like they just go on auto, auto board with the car.

✓ So, they give us something like an auto board that moves with the car.

The phrase 'they just go on auto, auto board with the car' is unclear and ungrammatical. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects the pronoun and article usage. Also, the repeated word 'give' is corrected.

× So I want to do that in the future.

✓ So, I want to do that in the future.

This sentence is grammatically correct; only a comma is added for clarity.