Party— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors that affect naturalness. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like "hooting" and "clinking oh pictures."

예시: Yes, I really enjoy parties, especially when I am with my close friends. For example, we often dance, sing, and take lots of pictures together. However, I usually feel awkward at parties where I don't know many people. Therefore, I prefer small gatherings with friends.

제안: Your response is confusing and contains many grammatical mistakes. Focus on giving a clear, direct answer first, then add specific reasons with linking words. Avoid double negatives and unclear phrases. Make sure your sentences are coherent and logical.

예시: When I was a child, I did not attend many parties because I was busy with my studies. Also, my parents were often unwell, so we rarely went out to celebrate. As a result, I had few opportunities to enjoy parties during my childhood.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors that make it hard to understand. Provide a clear topic sentence, then add specific details with linking words. Avoid confusing phrases and focus on expressing your ideas clearly and naturally.

예시: Yes, I have organized parties, especially for my birthdays. I usually invite my close friends to celebrate together. I enjoy the friendly atmosphere and the memorable moments we share, which I will never forget.

× Well, I really enjoyed the party specially with my friends because I can do anything like hooting, dancing, singing, clinking oh pictures mainly if I did.

✓ Well, I really enjoyed the party especially with my friends because I could do anything like hooting, dancing, singing, clicking photos mainly if I did.

The modal verb 'can' should be in past form 'could' to match the past tense context of 'I really enjoyed'. Also, 'clinking oh pictures' is incorrect; it should be 'clicking photos' as 'clicking' is the correct verb for taking pictures.

× If I go in any other occasions I feel very awkward.

✓ If I go to any other occasions, I feel very awkward.

The correct preposition to use with 'go' and 'occasions' is 'to', not 'in'. 'Go to' indicates attending an event or place.

× Well, when I was a child I didn't do not attend a lot of parties because at that time I was really busy in my story and my specially my parents was very sick towards my study also.

✓ Well, when I was a child I did not attend a lot of parties because at that time I was really busy with my studies and especially my parents were very strict about my study also.

Double negative 'didn't do not' is incorrect; it should be 'did not'. 'Busy in my story' is incorrect; it should be 'busy with my studies'. 'My parents was' is subject-verb agreement error; it should be 'my parents were'. 'Sick towards my study' is incorrect; likely meant 'strict about my study'.

× So there and they do not perform in to go anywhere else to enjoy a party.

✓ So they did not allow me to go anywhere else to enjoy a party.

The original sentence is unclear and uses incorrect prepositions and verbs. 'Do not perform in to go' is incorrect. The intended meaning is likely 'did not allow me to go'.

× Yeah, of course I have organized them anybody specially on my birthday, I always prefer to invited my friends in my parties and enjoy an eye on that day.

✓ Yeah, of course I have organized them, especially on my birthday. I always prefer to invite my friends to my parties and enjoy the day.

'Prefer to invited' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer to invite' (base form after 'prefer to'). 'Enjoy an eye on that day' is unclear; likely meant 'enjoy the day'. Also, 'anybody specially' is unclear and removed for clarity.

× I really enjoy such a friendly atmosphere sanded all Lord orphans also and such moment was such of such moment was our memorable for me that I have never forget in my life.

✓ I really enjoyed such a friendly atmosphere surrounded by all Lord orphans also, and such moments were memorable for me that I have never forgotten in my life.

'Sanded' is incorrect; likely meant 'surrounded'. 'Such moment was such of such moment was our memorable' is grammatically incorrect and unclear; corrected to 'such moments were memorable'. 'Have never forget' should be 'have never forgotten' (past participle).