Party— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally good and natural, but try to avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas and using linking words for better coherence. Also, use more precise vocabulary, for example, instead of 'unwind myself', say 'relax'.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy parties because they provide a great opportunity to socialize and meet new people. Moreover, I love listening to music and dancing, which helps me relax after a hectic workweek.

제안: Your answer needs more clarity and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about the frequency. Also, correct phrases like 'used to have party' to 'used to have parties' and 'small collaboration' to 'small gatherings'.

예시: When I was a kid, I used to have parties occasionally, mainly during major events like birthdays and New Year's celebrations. Instead of big parties, we preferred small gatherings with close friends and family.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and lacks coherence. Use correct tense and linking words to connect ideas. Also, be more specific about what you learned or experienced.

예시: Yes, I organized a party for my friend last year. It was really creative to design costumes and decorations, and it was also a great way to socialize with new people. Through this experience, I got to know many interesting things about event planning.

× Also, it helps me to unwind myself from the hectic work of the week.

✓ Also, it helps me to unwind from the hectic work of the week.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is unnecessary here because 'unwind' is a transitive verb that does not require a reflexive object. Using 'unwind myself' is incorrect; simply 'unwind' suffices.

× When I was a kid, I used to have party occasionally during major events like birthdays and New York Party.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to have parties occasionally during major events like birthdays and New Year parties.

The noun 'party' should be plural 'parties' because it refers to multiple occasions. Also, 'New York Party' seems incorrect; it should be 'New Year parties' to refer to the common celebration.

× Instead of big party, we go for small collaboration of close friends and family.

✓ Instead of a big party, we went for a small gathering of close friends and family.

The phrase 'big party' needs an article 'a' before it. Also, 'collaboration' is incorrect in this context; 'gathering' is more appropriate. Additionally, the tense should be past 'went' to match 'When I was a kid' context.

× Instead of big party, we go for small collaboration of close friends and family.

✓ Instead of a big party, we went for a small gathering of close friends and family.

The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to maintain consistency with the past time frame 'When I was a kid'.

× Yes, I had organized a party for my friend last year.

✓ Yes, I organized a party for my friend last year.

The past perfect tense 'had organized' is unnecessary here because the sentence simply states a past event with a specific time 'last year'. Simple past 'organized' is appropriate.

× It was really creative to design costumes and decoration of the party and also it is a great way to socialize with new people.

✓ Designing costumes and decorating the party was really creative, and it was also a great way to socialize with new people.

The original sentence has awkward structure and mixed tenses. Using gerunds 'Designing' and 'decorating' as subjects improves clarity. Also, maintain past tense 'was' to match the event time.

× I get to know much things.

✓ I got to know many things.

'Much' is used with uncountable nouns, while 'things' is countable plural, so 'many' is correct. Also, past tense 'got' matches the past event context.