Party— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on accuracy, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), correct grammar (e.g. 'I'm quite a social butterfly'), avoid unclear or incorrect words ('chain' and 'refracting' are wrong here) and finish with a concise supporting detail. Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences and use a linking word to connect ideas (e.g. 'because' or 'so').

예시: Yes, I do. I'm quite a social butterfly, so I enjoy parties because they give me a chance to meet friends and relax. For example, I like lively music and informal chats that help me unwind after a busy week.

제안: Make the timeline and frequency clear and correct grammar. Begin with a direct statement about frequency (e.g. 'I rarely had parties') then give specific supporting details using correct nouns ('meals' or 'homemade food' instead of 'home matrix') and correct plural/singular forms. Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' to contrast. Keep sentences short and accurate.

예시: I rarely had parties as a child apart from birthdays. My parents preferred simple celebrations, but I fondly remember small family gatherings where we played traditional games and ate homemade food with my classmates.

제안: Improve sentence structure and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence ('Yes, I have') and then describe specific tasks you did using correct verbs and phrases (e.g. 'I coordinated the guest list' not 'a cold delivery a coordinating'). Use linking words ('although', 'but', 'so') and correct participles to make the account coherent. Limit to 2–3 supporting sentences and correct punctuation.

예시: Yes, I have. I recently organized a surprise birthday party for my best friend, so I coordinated the guest list and arranged the decorations. Although planning was nerve-wracking, everyone had a great time, so the effort was worth it.

× To be honest, I'm quiet social butterfly so I'm a huge fan of parties.

✓ To be honest, I'm quite a social butterfly, so I'm a huge fan of parties.

The error is the wrong word 'quiet' instead of the adverb 'quite' and missing article 'a' before 'social butterfly'. Use 'quite' as an adverb to modify 'a social butterfly' and include the indefinite article 'a'. Also add a comma before 'so' for clarity.

× I find the vibrant atmosphere and the chain to mingle with friends incredibly refracting, especially as a way to unwind after a demanding.

✓ I find the vibrant atmosphere and the chance to mingle with friends incredibly refreshing, especially as a way to unwind after a demanding day.

Multiple errors: 'chain' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'chance' (11 incorrect preposition? but here noun misuse). 'Refracting' is the wrong word (verb) and should be the adjective 'refreshing'. The sentence also lacks the object after 'demanding' — add 'day'. These corrections fix word choice and complete the meaning.

× How often did you have a party when you were a kid?

✓ How often did you have parties when you were a kid?

The plural 'parties' fits the habitual frequency question in the past. Using plural matches the idea of repeated events; singular 'a party' sounds off for asking about frequency.

× Well, apart from my birthdays, I didn't have a birthday is very frequently.

✓ Well, apart from my birthdays, I didn't have birthday parties very frequently.

This sentence has awkward structure and word order. 'Didn't have a birthday is very frequently' is ungrammatical. Change to 'didn't have birthday parties very frequently' to express infrequent occurrences, using plural 'birthdays' earlier and 'birthday parties' as the noun phrase.

× My parents usually keep things simple, but I fondly remember those more gatherings where we play traditional games and enjoy home matrix with my classmate.

✓ My parents usually kept things simple, but I fondly remember small gatherings where we played traditional games and enjoyed homemade food with my classmates.

Tense should be past ('kept','played','enjoyed') to match 'when you were a kid'. 'Those more gatherings' is wrong word order and word choice; use 'small gatherings'. 'Home matrix' is incorrect; intended 'homemade food'. 'Classmate' should be plural 'classmates' for general memory.

× Have you ever organized a party?

✓ Have you ever organized a party?

This sentence is correct as written; no grammar correction needed. Included here to indicate it meets the question and requires no change.

× Yes actually I recently threw a surprise birthday party for my best friend.

✓ Yes, actually I recently threw a surprise birthday party for my best friend.

The sentence is grammatically correct except for missing comma after 'Yes'. Tense 'threw' and adverb 'recently' are appropriate. Add comma for natural speech rhythm.

× A cold delivery a coordinating the guest list and decoration was a big nerve wracking business and everyone has such a great time.

✓ Coordinating the guest list and decorations was really nerve-wracking, and everyone had such a great time.

Original contains unintelligible fragments ('A cold delivery a'). The intended meaning is that coordinating guest list and decorations was stressful. Use gerund phrase 'Coordinating the guest list and decorations' as subject, hyphenate 'nerve-wracking', and change 'has' to past 'had' to match 'recently threw'.

× Makes the effort totally worth it.

✓ It made the effort totally worth it.

Fragment lacking subject and correct tense. Add subject 'It' and past tense 'made' to agree with prior sentence about the party being in the past. Alternatively, 'That made the effort totally worth it.' would also work.