Party— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap doğal ama karışık ve tekrarlayıcı; cümle yapısı ve kelime seçimi geliştirilmelidir. Kısa ve doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kurun, ardından bir veya iki destekleyici ayrıntı verin. Bağlaçlar (for example, because, so) kullanarak akışı düzeltin ve aynı kelimeleri tekrar etmekten kaçının. Örneğin: ‘I enjoy parties, but I don’t attend them very often because I prefer small gatherings.’ gibi daha düzgün ve açık ifadeler kullanın.

예시: I enjoy parties, but I rarely go to them because I prefer quiet meetings with close friends. For example, I’d rather have dinner with two or three friends than attend a large, noisy party.

제안: Cevap ana fikri veriyor ama dilbilgisi hataları ve belirsiz ifadeler var. Geçmiş zaman kullanımı doğru fakat cümleler daha net ve spesifik olmalı. Bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, ardından sıklık ve bir örnek verin; ‘used to’ ile birlikte net zaman zarfları kullanın ve çoğul/tekil uyumuna dikkat edin.

예시: We used to have birthday parties quite often when I was a child, usually once a year for each friend. For example, my family always invited neighbours and we played games and ate cake at home.

제안: Cevap doğrudan ama kişisel sağlık bilgisini tekrar edip belirsiz ifadeler kullanıyor; daha uygun ve öz bir ifade tercih edin. Kısa bir konu cümlesiyle başlayıp nedenini kibar ve net şekilde açıklayın; kişisel durumu paylaşmak istiyorsanız daha doğal ve tek cümlede belirtin. Örneğin, ‘I haven't organized a party because I get anxious in charge of events.’ şeklinde ifade edin.

예시: No, I haven't organized a party because I tend to feel anxious when I have to plan events. Instead, I usually help with small tasks like buying food or decorating when friends host gatherings.

× I do like parties, but I just don't attempt that too much often, so I don't go often to do parties. Do the party, you know?

✓ I do like parties, but I don't attend them very often, so I don't go to parties often, you know?

The original sentence has incorrect word choice and adverb placement. 'Attempt' is wrong; the correct verb is 'attend'. Adverbs like 'often' and 'very' should be placed before or after the verb appropriately: 'don't attend them very often' or 'don't go to parties often'. Also 'do the party' is unnatural; use 'go to parties' or 'attend parties'. Improve by using the correct verb 'attend' and placing adverbs next to the verb: practice replacing 'attempt' with 'attend' and placing 'very often' after the verb.

× How often did you have a party when you were a kid?

✓ How often did you have parties when you were a kid?

The question asks about a habitual action in the past and should use the plural 'parties' to reflect repeated events. Using singular 'a party' sounds like asking about a single event. Use plural for repeated past occurrences: 'How often did you have parties when you were a kid?'

× We used to have the birthday parties, which is have that amount of parties because you are little, you know you can't just do adult things in the parties as Childs.

✓ We used to have birthday parties, which were many because when you are little you can't have adult activities at parties.

Multiple issues: article and plurality ('the birthday parties' -> 'birthday parties'), subject-verb agreement in relative clause ('which is have' -> 'which were many' or better rephrased), incorrect noun plural form ('Childs' -> 'children'), and improper preposition/use of 'do' -> 'have' or 'have activities'. Suggestion: simplify and correct grammar by saying 'We used to have birthday parties, which were frequent because when you are little you can't have adult activities at parties.'

× No, I haven't because I can't organize anything because I have an anxiety problem with myself.

✓ No, I haven't, because I can't organize anything; I have an anxiety problem.

The original repeats 'because' and uses awkward reflexive phrasing 'anxiety problem with myself'. Remove redundancy and the reflexive phrase. Keep present perfect 'I haven't' correctly. Better: 'No, I haven't, because I can't organize anything; I have an anxiety problem.'

× I I have a mental issue. So yeah, I couldn't.

✓ I have a mental health issue, so I couldn't organize one.

Double 'I' is a typo. 'Mental issue' is better expressed as 'mental health issue'. 'So yeah, I couldn't.' lacks an object and tense clarity — specify what you couldn't do: 'I couldn't organize one.' Maintain present 'I have' for condition and past modal 'couldn't' referring to organizing in the past. Improve by removing duplication, using clearer noun phrase and completing the sentence.