Party— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, avoid redundancy, and add one brief specific detail using linking words. Focus on tense and noun forms (e.g., "my little brother's birthday party").

예시: Yes, I enjoy parties. For example, last month I organized my little brother's birthday party, which was a memorable evening because we invited close family and prepared games and a homemade cake.

제안: Give a direct, grammatically correct topic sentence about frequency, then support with one or two specific examples. Use past tense consistently and linking words (e.g., "usually," "for example"). Avoid filler and incomplete phrases.

예시: When I was a child, I usually attended parties several times a month. For example, I often went to my friends' birthday parties and family gatherings on weekends, where we celebrated with food and games.

제안: Begin with a clear yes/no statement, correct repetition and possessive forms, and give one or two specific details about what you did. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to explain why it was memorable.

예시: Yes, I organized my younger brother's birthday party last month. I planned the guest list and decorations, and it was memorable because we surprised him with a themed cake and fun games that everyone enjoyed.

× When I was a child I frequently go to the parties with my family members like I also going went to the my friends birthday party along with others birthday party or social events so. I would say I quite.

✓ When I was a child I frequently went to parties with my family members. I also went to my friends' birthday parties and other social events.

This sentence mixes present tense forms (go, going) with past context 'When I was a child', so past tense should be used. Use 'went' for the past habitual action. Also remove redundant words and fix possessive 'friends'' and plural 'parties' for clarity. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and split into two shorter sentences to improve clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Definitely, I enjoy parties and last month I engaged in my little brother birthday parties and it was an outstanding memory in my life.

✓ Definitely, I enjoy parties and last month I attended my little brother's birthday party; it was an outstanding memory in my life.

The original uses plural 'birthday parties' but context indicates a single event 'last month', so singular 'birthday party' is appropriate. Also possessive form 'little brother's' is required. Replace 'engaged in' with 'attended' for natural collocation. Use a semicolon or split sentences for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× When I was a child I frequently go to the parties with my family members like I also going went to the my friends birthday party along with others birthday party or social events so. I would say I quite.

✓ When I was a child I frequently went to parties with my family members. I also went to my friends' birthday parties and other social events.

The phrase 'the parties' is unnecessary; use plural 'parties' without 'the' for general habitual actions. Also 'the my friends' is incorrect; remove 'the' and use possessive 'friends''. This falls under article errors and plural usage. Ensure articles are used only where specific reference is intended. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Last month I organized a party party which was of my younger brother and it was a memorable experience for me and we enjoyed the party.

✓ Last month I organized a party for my younger brother, and it was a memorable experience for me; we all enjoyed it.

The sentence incorrectly repeats 'party' and uses awkward phrasing 'which was of my younger brother'. Use 'for my younger brother' to indicate whom the party was for. Keep past tense 'organized' and 'was' consistent. Also condense redundant clauses to sound natural. Grammar problem type ID: 5