Party— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Pronunciation and word choice need correction (e.g., 'parents' → 'parties'). Make answers concise and directly structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce hesitations and filler words ('um', 'uh'). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'celebrations', 'wedding reception').

예시: Yes, I enjoy parties. For example, I often celebrate with friends and family, and when my husband and I got married we held a wedding reception at a nice restaurant, with toasts, a buffet, and music.

제안: Correct vocabulary errors ('pairs/Paris' → 'parties'). Avoid defensive openings like 'Don't get me wrong'—answer directly with a topic sentence. Provide a clear frequency and a specific example, using linking words such as 'but' or 'however' to contrast. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I didn't have many parties as a child, but my parents always organized a birthday party for me each year. For instance, each birthday we invited a few friends and had a small cake and games, which I still remember fondly.

제안: Reduce hesitations and remove filler words. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give 2–3 specific details (who, what, where, result) linked coherently. Use varied but appropriate vocabulary (e.g., 'hosted', 'buffet', 'playlist', 'guests').

예시: Yes, I once hosted a house party with my roommate. We invited about 20 guests, prepared a buffet of homemade dishes and desserts, and played a lively playlist, so everyone had a great time.

× Yes, I really enjoy parents.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy parties.

The student used 'parents' instead of 'parties', a word choice error causing a nonsensical sentence. Replace with 'parties' to match the question about liking parties. Also 'enjoy' correctly pairs with the plural noun 'parties'.

× Umm, I have the opportunity to have, uh, many parties with my friends, with my family as well and with my husband.

✓ I have the opportunity to have many parties with my friends, my family, and my husband.

The original has filler words and awkward repetition ('with' repeated); streamline to a natural list: separate items with commas and use 'and' before the last item. Remove extraneous fillers like 'uh' and 'Umm' for clarity.

× And when we married, uh, me and my husband, I did a very good party with my family in a good restaurant, uh, with a toast and many things included.

✓ When we got married, my husband and I had a very nice party with my family at a good restaurant, with a toast and many other things included.

Use 'my husband and I' as the subject, not 'me and my husband'. Use the correct verb for marriage event: 'got married'. 'Had a party' is more natural than 'did a party'. Use 'at' for restaurants. Replace 'very good' with 'very nice' and 'many things included' with 'many other things included' for natural English.

× Don't get me wrong, I didn't have many pairs when I Paris when I was a kid but I always ha had a party for my birthday or just an A small celebration and I'm really grateful for that.

✓ Don't get me wrong, I didn't have many parties when I was a kid, but I always had a party for my birthday or just a small celebration, and I'm really grateful for that.

Multiple issues: 'pairs' and 'Paris' are incorrect words; correct is 'parties'. 'I Paris' is nonsense so replace with 'I was'. Remove duplicated 'ha had' to 'had'. Capitalization: 'A small' -> 'a small'. Ensure past tense consistency: 'didn't have' and 'had' both past. Add commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× I think my parents did everything they could for make me happy.

✓ I think my parents did everything they could to make me happy.

After 'could' the infinitive requires 'to make' rather than 'for make'. Use 'to' + base verb. This fixes the infinitive construction.

× Yes, I remember that I organized a party with my, uh, roommate once and we were very, uh, thrilled about that.

✓ Yes, I remember organizing a party with my roommate once, and we were very thrilled about it.

Streamline 'I remember that I organized' to 'I remember organizing' (both are acceptable, but the gerund is more natural). Remove filler 'uh'. Use 'about it' rather than 'about that' for natural reference. Keep past tense 'organized'/'were thrilled' consistent.

× Uh, we invited many people and we offered, uh, many desserts or dishes, recipes, very, uh, it was very fun and we had a very good time with music and everything at home.

✓ We invited many people and offered many desserts and dishes. It was very fun; we had a great time with music and everything at home.

Remove fillers. 'Desserts or dishes, recipes' is confused; separate 'desserts and dishes' or 'different recipes'. Use 'great' or 'very good' once to avoid repetition. Break into two sentences for clarity: describe the food, then the atmosphere. Maintain past tense 'invited' and 'offered'.