Traffic— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid repetition. Use clear and correct vocabulary, for example, say "zebra crossing" once and avoid unclear phrases like "provide a spaces to pass the fee." Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

예시: Yes, there are several crosswalks near my home, which help adults and older people walk safely. Additionally, there is a zebra crossing specifically designed for children, ensuring their safety when crossing the street.

제안: Focus on making your answer more fluent and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect your ideas clearly. For example, instead of repeating "traffic lights," use pronouns or synonyms. Also, clarify your points with specific reasons and avoid filler words like "literally."

예시: Yes, I would like to fix the traffic lights near my house because they often malfunction, which frustrates drivers and makes it unsafe for both adults and children to cross the road.

× Yes, there are several crosswalks around the place where I'm living right now as it helps the adults and older people to walk around safely.

✓ Yes, there are several crosswalks around the place where I live right now as they help adults and older people walk around safely.

The phrase 'I'm living' is incorrect here because the present continuous tense is generally not used with stative verbs like 'live' when referring to permanent situations. Also, 'it helps' should be 'they help' to agree with the plural subject 'crosswalks'.

× Umm. Along with this, there is a zebra zebra crossing as well for the kids and they also provide a spaces to pass the fee.

✓ Umm. Along with this, there is a zebra crossing as well for the kids and it also provides a space to pass the fee.

The phrase 'zebra zebra crossing' is repetitive and should be 'zebra crossing'. 'They' is incorrect because 'zebra crossing' is singular, so 'it' should be used. 'Provide a spaces' is incorrect; 'spaces' is plural but preceded by 'a', so it should be 'a space'. Also, 'pass the fee' is unclear and likely incorrect in context; however, since the instruction is to correct only grammar mistakes from the list, this is left as is.

× So I would like to change the traffic lights as the traffic lights near around my house is not working properly and it literally makes frustrating and confusing to the people who are driving.

✓ So I would like to change the traffic lights as the traffic lights near my house are not working properly and they literally make it frustrating and confusing for the people who are driving.

The subject 'traffic lights' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'it literally makes frustrating and confusing' is incorrect; it should be 'they literally make it frustrating and confusing' to correctly use plural subject and object.

× So I would like to change the traffic lights as the traffic lights near around my house is not working properly and it literally makes frustrating and confusing to the people who are driving.

✓ So I would like to change the traffic lights as the traffic lights near my house are not working properly and they literally make it frustrating and confusing for the people who are driving.

The phrase 'near around' is redundant and incorrect; 'near' alone is sufficient and correct. Also, 'to the people' should be 'for the people' to correctly express the effect on people.

× And for it's really difficult for the adults and children as well to cross the roads because it's unsafe for them.

✓ And it's really difficult for adults and children to cross the roads because it's unsafe for them.

The phrase 'And for it's' is incorrect; 'for' is unnecessary here. Also, 'the adults and children' can be simplified to 'adults and children' unless referring to specific groups. The sentence is clearer and grammatically correct without 'for'.