Traffic— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors, which affect naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

예시: No, there are not many crosswalks where I live because the area has several parks and open spaces. Therefore, people usually walk in these relaxed areas rather than busy streets. I enjoy living here because it feels peaceful and safe.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes, which reduce effectiveness. Try to give a direct response with a clear topic sentence, then explain your idea with specific details using linking words. Make sure your sentences are complete and easy to understand.

예시: Yes, I would like to improve the traffic by encouraging people to use alternative routes. For example, if more drivers take smaller roads, the main streets would be less congested. This change could help reduce traffic jams in my area.

× To be honest, no, it's this place when I where I live, it's not many crossroads because here is some parks, here is some relaxed spaces and I can enjoy with life here.

✓ To be honest, no, in the place where I live, there are not many crossroads because there are some parks, there are some relaxing spaces, and I can enjoy life here.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'it's this place when I where I live' which is unclear and ungrammatical. Also, 'it's not many crossroads' is incorrect because 'crossroads' is plural and requires 'there are not many crossroads'. The phrase 'here is some parks' should be 'there are some parks' to correctly use 'there be' for plural nouns. Similarly, 'here is some relaxed spaces' should be 'there are some relaxing spaces'. Using 'there are' correctly indicates the existence of plural nouns. The phrase 'enjoy with life here' is incorrect; it should be 'enjoy life here' without 'with'. Suggestions: Use 'there are' for plural nouns to indicate existence, and structure the sentence clearly to express location and quantity.

× Yes, especially I can change traffic like I can learn people to change their way to using another little ways and traffic will be traffic will be solution.

✓ Yes, especially, I can change traffic by teaching people to change their ways by using other small routes, and traffic will be improved.

The original sentence misuses modal verbs and verb forms. 'I can learn people' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'I can teach people'. 'To using' is incorrect; it should be 'to use' or 'by using'. The phrase 'another little ways' is ungrammatical; 'other small routes' is more appropriate. The repetition 'traffic will be traffic will be solution' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'traffic will be improved' or 'traffic will be a solution'. Suggestions: Use modal verbs correctly with appropriate verb forms, replace 'learn' with 'teach' when indicating instructing others, and use clear, concise phrases to express ideas.