Traffic— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more concise and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid redundancy and focus on clarity. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why crosswalks are important in your area, and finish with a specific benefit.

예시: Yes, there are many crosswalks in my area because it is a busy downtown with heavy traffic. Therefore, the government has installed them to help pedestrians cross safely and save time. As a result, walking around the area is more convenient and secure.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid repeating words like 'moreover' unnecessarily. Try to give specific examples of changes you want and explain their benefits clearly.

예시: Yes, I would like to improve public transportation because there are too many vehicles on the road, which causes heavy traffic. If the government provides better buses and trains, people might use them more. Therefore, traffic congestion would reduce, and the roads would be safer if everyone also followed traffic rules strictly.

× Yes, there are ample number of crosswalks where I live because I live in a downtown and due to huge traffic.

✓ Yes, there is an ample number of crosswalks where I live because I live in a downtown area and due to heavy traffic.

The phrase 'ample number' requires the article 'an' before it to be grammatically correct. Also, 'downtown' should be preceded by 'a' to indicate a singular area, and 'huge traffic' is better expressed as 'heavy traffic' for natural usage.

× So the government provide benefit to the pedestrian to just walk from the way as well as with the help of that they can save their time and it's very easy and comfortable.

✓ So the government provides benefits to pedestrians to just walk on the way, and with the help of that, they can save their time; it's very easy and comfortable.

The subject 'government' is singular, so the verb should be 'provides' not 'provide'. 'Benefit' should be plural 'benefits' to match the context. 'Pedestrian' should be plural 'pedestrians' as it refers to people in general. The phrase 'walk from the way' is incorrect; it should be 'walk on the way' or 'walk along the way'.

× Moreover, it's more safe for pedestrian to just walk from them.

✓ Moreover, it's safer for pedestrians to just walk on them.

The comparative form of 'safe' is 'safer', not 'more safe'. 'Pedestrian' should be plural 'pedestrians'. The preposition 'from' is incorrect here; 'on' is appropriate when referring to walking on crosswalks.

× Yes, there are many things which I want to change in my area for trafficking as nowadays due to use because there is a large number of vehicles on the road and which increases the traffic.

✓ Yes, there are many things I want to change in my area regarding traffic, as nowadays there are a large number of vehicles on the road, which increases the traffic.

The phrase 'for trafficking' is incorrect; it should be 'regarding traffic'. The phrase 'due to use because' is redundant and confusing; it is better to remove it. 'There is a large number' should be 'there are a large number' because 'vehicles' is plural.

× Moreover, with the help of good public transportation, I think so we can tackle this.

✓ Moreover, with the help of good public transportation, I think we can tackle this.

The phrase 'I think so we can' is incorrect; 'so' is unnecessary and should be removed for correct sentence structure.

× Moreover, if everyone follow more rules, it's also very beneficial.

✓ Moreover, if everyone follows more rules, it's also very beneficial.

The subject 'everyone' is singular, so the verb should be 'follows' not 'follow' to maintain subject-verb agreement.