Traffic— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer addresses the question but contains several grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as 'coursework' instead of 'crosswalks' and awkward sentence structures. To improve, focus on using correct vocabulary and clearer sentence construction. Also, try to avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are concise and coherent by using linking words.

예시: Actually, there are not many crosswalks in my country, Indonesia. Moreover, people here are less aware of pedestrian safety compared to other countries. As a result, crosswalks are uncommon, which sometimes makes it difficult and unsafe to cross busy streets.

제안: Your answer is relevant and shows clear ideas, but it can be improved by correcting grammar and using more precise vocabulary. For example, 'traffic cohesion' should be 'traffic congestion,' and 'people become pedestrian' should be 'people to become pedestrians.' Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, when I traveled abroad, I was inspired by how many people choose to walk instead of driving. Therefore, I would like to encourage more people in Indonesia to become pedestrians because it can reduce traffic congestion and pollution. Additionally, creating more pedestrian-friendly areas would make the city safer and more enjoyable for everyone.

× Actually there are not many coursework in my country Indonesia.

✓ Actually there is not much coursework in my country Indonesia.

The word 'coursework' is an uncountable noun, so it should be used with 'much' instead of 'many' and the verb should be singular 'is' instead of 'are'.

× And also people here less aware too pedestrian coupled with uh other country.

✓ And also people here are less aware of pedestrians compared to other countries.

The phrase 'less aware too pedestrian' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'aware of' and 'pedestrian' should be plural 'pedestrians'. Also, 'coupled with uh other country' is better expressed as 'compared to other countries'.

× So crosswalk it's not common in here.

✓ So crosswalks are not common here.

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'Crosswalk' should be plural 'crosswalks' to match the context, and 'it's not common in here' should be 'are not common here' for correct subject-verb agreement and natural phrasing.

× They sometimes make difficult and unsafe to cross busy crosswalk with safety.

✓ They sometimes make it difficult and unsafe to cross busy streets safely.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and object. Adding 'it' clarifies the object of 'make'. Also, 'crosswalk' is misused; 'busy streets' is more appropriate. 'With safety' should be 'safely' to use the adverb form.

× Actually yes uh, when I travel abroad I was inspired by how many people they work instead of driving.

✓ Actually yes, when I traveled abroad, I was inspired by how many people work instead of driving.

The verb 'travel' should be in past tense 'traveled' to match 'was inspired'. Also, 'they work' is redundant; 'how many people work' is sufficient.

× I would like to encourage more people in Indonesia become pedestrian because it can reduce traffic cohesion and pollution.

✓ I would like to encourage more people in Indonesia to become pedestrians because it can reduce traffic congestion and pollution.

The verb 'encourage' should be followed by 'to' plus the base verb 'become'. 'Pedestrian' should be plural 'pedestrians'. 'Traffic cohesion' is incorrect; the correct term is 'traffic congestion'.