Traffic— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and accuracy, reduce hesitations, correct vocabulary, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep answers concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

예시: Yes, there are many crosswalks near my home. However, I often find them inconvenient because I have to wait a long time for the traffic lights to change, which slows me down. If possible, I would like shorter signal cycles or pedestrian priority during busy times.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence stating one clear change, then add a specific reason and a brief suggestion. Avoid repetition and hesitations; use correct phrases (e.g., 'pedestrian road' → 'sidewalk' or 'pedestrian paths'). Keep to 2–3 sentences with linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

예시: Yes. I would like the sidewalks to be widened because they are very narrow and crowded, especially during rush hour. Widening them would improve safety and make walking more comfortable for residents.

× Yeah, there's a lot of, uh, close works, a lot of the world around the place where I live and, but I feel like it's so annoying because I need to wait for uh, the light change.

✓ Yeah, there are a lot of crosswalks around the place where I live, but I feel like it's annoying because I need to wait for the lights to change.

The student used 'there's' (there is) with a plural noun and said 'close works' and 'the light change'. Use 'there are' for plural 'crosswalks' (Singular and plural issue, also Subject-verb agreement). 'Close works' is a mispronunciation/misspelling of 'crosswalks'. 'The lights to change' is the correct noun phrase: 'lights' plural and the verb construction 'to change' or 'change' with 'the lights'. Suggestion: say 'there are a lot of crosswalks' and 'I need to wait for the lights to change'.

× I want to widen the pedestrian Rd. because there is really narrow the IT is really narrow. So I want to uh, because and.

✓ I want to widen the pedestrian road because it is really narrow.

The original sentence has word order and repetition problems and an extraneous fragment 'So I want to uh, because and.' Reorder to 'it is really narrow' rather than 'there is really narrow the IT is really narrow'. Remove filler fragments. Suggestion: produce a single clear sentence: 'I want to widen the pedestrian road because it is really narrow.'