Traffic— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve pronunciation and reduce hesitations; use a clear topic sentence and concise supporting details. Correct vocabulary (use “crosswalks” not “crossway works”), fix grammar (e.g., subject-verb agreement and articles), and avoid repetition. Keep answer to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word to add one specific detail or example.

예시: Yes, there are many crosswalks near where I live because it’s a busy area. For example, the local government has installed crossings near the main school and the market to keep pedestrians safe.

제안: Clarify ideas and correct word choice; start with a direct topic sentence, then give one clear specific measure with a linking word. Use correct collocations (e.g., “install more pedestrian crossings,” “reduce the speed limit,” “make the area much safer”) and fix grammar (articles and comparative forms). Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid unclear phrases like “ending more departure crossing.”

예시: Yes, I would change the traffic management near parks to protect children and older people. For instance, the council should install more pedestrian crossings and reduce the speed limit around parks to make the area much safer.

× Yes, there are lots of crossway works umm, because uh, I, I live in a busy area, uh, there need a lot of crosswalk to keep people safe and the government build many crosswalks around the mine, around the school or areas.

✓ Yes, there are lots of crosswalks, because I live in a busy area. There need to be many crosswalks to keep people safe, and the government has built many crosswalks near the market, schools, and other areas.

Multiple sentence structure and related grammar problems: incorrect phrase 'crossway works' and inconsistent plural 'crosswalks' were used; run-on sentence and filler words should be removed; 'there need a lot of crosswalk' is ungrammatical — use 'there need to be' or better 'there should be many crosswalks' for necessity, and subject-verb agreement and tense must be corrected: 'the government build' should be past perfect or present perfect 'has built' to indicate completed action affecting present. Also 'mine' likely intended 'market' or 'main' — replaced with 'market' and clarified 'schools and other areas'. Suggestions: remove fillers, break into shorter sentences, ensure plural forms for count nouns, use 'there + be' constructions correctly ('there need to be' or 'there should be'), and use correct verb tense and agreement ('has built').

× Yes, I would like better traffic management around parks because there are many children and older people here.

✓ Yes, I would like better traffic management around parks because there are many children and elderly people there.

Minor issue with word choice and demonstrative reference: 'older people here' is acceptable but 'elderly people there' is more natural when referring to parks mentioned earlier. No tense change needed. Suggestion: use consistent demonstrative ('there') to refer back to 'parks' and prefer 'elderly' or 'older adults' for formality.

× For example, ending more departure crossing and lowering a spin the limit near parks around UH would make the area much safe.

✓ For example, adding more pedestrian crossings and lowering the speed limit near parks would make the area much safer.

Multiple vocabulary and adjective/adverb errors: 'ending more departure crossing' is incorrect — likely meant 'adding more pedestrian crossings'. 'Lowering a spin the limit' is unintelligible; correct phrase is 'lowering the speed limit'. 'Much safe' is incorrect adjective/adverb collocation; use comparative or adverb 'much safer' or simply 'safer'. Also removed unnecessary 'around UH' because unclear; if 'UH' is a specific place, it can be 'around UH' but keep sentence clear. Suggestions: use correct nouns ('pedestrian crossings'), correct collocations ('speed limit'), and comparative form 'safer' with modifiers 'much' or 'far' as needed.