Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и естественным. Избегайте повторений и грамматических ошибок. Используйте связки для логичности и добавьте конкретные детали.

예시: Yes, I enjoy shopping, especially for vintage dishes like cups and plates. I often take my daughter with me when I visit shopping malls. For instance, last weekend we went to a mall and I bought some beautiful vintage cups.

제안: Ответ хороший, но требует улучшения связности и точности. Следует избегать ошибок и использовать более подходящие слова для описания цен.

예시: Yes, I always compare prices before buying because the same product can be much cheaper in another store. For example, recently I wanted to buy a bigger bowl; it cost 45,000 in one market but only 11,000 in another.

제안: Ответ неполный и содержит грамматические ошибки. Следует использовать связки для плавности и завершать мысли. Добавьте конкретные детали.

예시: Yes, it's often difficult for me to make choices because I can compare prices easily but not quality. Therefore, I visit several stores before deciding. For example, recently I bought clothes after comparing both price and quality carefully.

제안: Ответ содержит ошибки и нечеткие формулировки. Следует улучшить грамматику и связность, а также привести более ясный пример.

예시: Actually, expensive products are not always better than cheaper ones. For example, I recently bought linen trousers and found that another store sold similar quality trousers at a lower price.

× Mostly I like spending money on dishes, different kinds of like cups, plates.

✓ Mostly I like spending money on dishes, different kinds like cups and plates.

The phrase 'different kinds of like cups, plates' is incorrect. It should be 'different kinds like cups and plates' or 'different kinds of cups and plates'. The word 'of' is unnecessary here, and 'like' should be used to indicate examples. Also, 'cups, plates' should be connected with 'and' for clarity.

× If I see something Vintaj, I can spend my money on it.

✓ If I see something vintage, I can spend my money on it.

The word 'Vintaj' seems to be a misspelling of 'vintage'. Correct spelling is necessary for clarity and proper sentence structure.

× I usually take my daughter. For example, am I usually take my daughter and I'll go to shopping mall I like.

✓ I usually take my daughter. For example, I usually take my daughter and go to the shopping mall I like.

The sentence 'am I usually take my daughter' is grammatically incorrect. The correct form is 'I usually take my daughter'. Also, 'go to shopping mall' should be 'go to the shopping mall' to include the definite article.

× For example recently I wanted to buy a bigger bowl and it costs in one marketplace 45,010 year and in one shot I could buy it for only 11,000.

✓ For example, recently I wanted to buy a bigger bowl and it cost 45,010 in one marketplace, and in another shop I could buy it for only 11,000.

The phrase 'it costs in one marketplace 45,010 year' is incorrect. The verb tense should be past ('cost'), and 'in one marketplace' should be placed correctly. Also, 'one shot' should be 'another shop'. The word 'year' is unnecessary here.

× It's always difficult for me to make choice.

✓ It's always difficult for me to make a choice.

The noun 'choice' is countable and singular here, so it requires the article 'a' before it.

× For example, recently I bought clothes and I compared the price and quality before I.

✓ For example, recently I bought clothes and I compared the price and quality before I bought them.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'before I'. It should be completed with the verb and object, e.g., 'before I bought them' to be grammatically correct.

× Actually know some expensive things may have really bad quality while the cheaper one has really good quality.

✓ Actually, I know some expensive things may have really bad quality while the cheaper ones have really good quality.

The sentence is missing the subject pronoun 'I' after 'Actually'. Also, 'the cheaper one' should be plural 'the cheaper ones' to match 'some expensive things'.

× For example, recently I bought a linen trousers Ann.

✓ For example, recently I bought linen trousers.

The phrase 'a linen trousers Ann' is incorrect. 'Trousers' is plural and does not take 'a'. Also, 'Ann' seems out of place and should be removed unless it is a proper noun with context.

× I compare it with another store, they had the same quality but the price was different.

✓ I compared it with another store; they had the same quality but the price was different.

The verb tense should be past 'compared' to match 'had'. Also, the sentence is a run-on and should be separated with a semicolon or period.