Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some unclear phrases like 'a shopping gives me bees' which affects clarity. Try to use clear and natural expressions, avoid redundancy, and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I like shopping because it helps me relax and relieve stress. Whenever I have free time, I usually go shopping. For instance, last week I went to a nearby mall with my mother to buy some clothes.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has some hesitations and grammatical errors like 'when I show' instead of 'when I shop'. Try to speak confidently, avoid filler words, and use clear linking words like 'because' and 'so' to make your reasoning coherent. Also, be careful with grammar and sentence structure.

예시: Yes, I always compare prices when I shop because I believe it's important to avoid wasting money. Moreover, saving money helps me prepare for future needs. Therefore, I usually choose affordable and reasonably priced items.

제안: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and slightly unclear in parts. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details, and use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly. Also, watch for grammar and sentence flow to make your answer more natural and effective.

예시: It depends on the situation. Sometimes I find it difficult to choose clothes because I prefer neutral colors, but malls often have limited options in those shades. So, it can be challenging to find what I like.

제안: Your answer conveys your opinion clearly but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to make your argument more coherent and natural.

예시: No, I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones. The price doesn't always reflect quality. In my experience, some affordable products have good quality, while some expensive ones are of poor quality.

× Yes, I like shopping because a shopping gives me bees and moreover it helps me to relieve from my stress.

✓ Yes, I like shopping because shopping gives me peace and moreover it helps me to relieve my stress.

The word 'shopping' is uncountable here, so 'a shopping' is incorrect. Also, 'bees' seems to be a typo for 'peace'. The phrase 'relieve from my stress' should be 'relieve my stress' without 'from'.

× Also, whenever I'm free or I don't have anything to do or in my leisure time, I mostly prefer to do shopping.

✓ Also, whenever I'm free or don't have anything to do in my leisure time, I mostly prefer to go shopping.

The phrase 'do shopping' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'go shopping'. Also, 'or in my leisure time' is misplaced and should be integrated properly.

× For example, last week I went for shopping with my mother in a shopping mall nearby.

✓ For example, last week I went shopping with my mother in a nearby shopping mall.

The phrase 'went for shopping' is incorrect; the correct form is 'went shopping'. Also, 'shopping mall nearby' should be 'nearby shopping mall' for correct adjective order.

× Yes, I definitely compare prices when I show because, uh, I think I believe that we are wasting a lot of money on just buying clothes or something from the shopping mall is not a good idea.

✓ Yes, I definitely compare prices when I shop because, uh, I think buying clothes or something from the shopping mall without comparing prices is not a good idea.

The word 'show' is a typo for 'shop'. The sentence structure is awkward; rephrasing improves clarity and grammar.

× Moreover, money is something which should be saved for their future needs to.

✓ Moreover, money is something which should be saved for our future needs too.

The pronoun 'their' is incorrect here; it should be 'our' to match the speaker. Also, 'to' should be 'too' meaning 'also'.

× So I mostly prefer those things which are quite cheap and which are affordable.

✓ So I mostly prefer things which are quite cheap and affordable.

The phrase 'those things' is acceptable but 'things' alone is more natural here. No major error but simplification improves clarity.

× Honestly it depends upon situation because sometime I find it difficult to make choices when I shop mostly in terms of clothes because I'm a person who loves neutral colors and there are not wide choices of neutral colors available and mall so it makes a difference.

✓ Honestly, it depends upon the situation because sometimes I find it difficult to make choices when I shop, mostly in terms of clothes, because I'm a person who loves neutral colors and there are not many choices of neutral colors available in malls, so it makes a difference.

Missing article 'the' before 'situation'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'Not wide choices' should be 'not many choices'. 'And mall' should be 'in malls'. Punctuation added for clarity.

× No, I don't think so that expensive products are always better than cheaper ones.

✓ No, I don't think that expensive products are always better than cheaper ones.

The phrase 'don't think so that' is incorrect; 'don't think that' is correct.

× Honestly I believe that it doesn't.

✓ Honestly, I believe that it doesn't matter.

The sentence is incomplete; 'it doesn't' what? Adding 'matter' completes the thought.

× The price of a product doesn't matter, the quality is the thing which matters a lot as there are.

✓ The price of a product doesn't matter; the quality is what matters a lot.

The phrase 'as there are' is incorrect and unnecessary. The sentence is better with a semicolon and clearer phrasing.

× I have experienced many times that a cheaper products are available in good qualities whereas expensive one has worst quality.

✓ I have experienced many times that cheaper products are available in good quality whereas an expensive one has worse quality.

'A cheaper products' is incorrect; 'cheaper products' (plural) or 'a cheaper product' (singular) is correct. 'Good qualities' should be 'good quality' (uncountable). 'Expensive one' needs an article 'an'. 'Worst quality' should be 'worse quality' for comparison.