Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan pengucapan agar jawaban terdengar lebih alami dan efektif. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih singkat dan jelas tanpa pengulangan yang tidak perlu. Misalnya, hindari pengulangan kata dan perbaiki struktur kalimat agar lebih mudah dipahami.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy shopping. I usually shop once a month for most things, but if something urgent comes up, I might shop weekly. I shop both online and in stores, but I prefer online shopping because it's more convenient.

제안: Perbaiki kejelasan dan struktur kalimat agar jawaban lebih mudah dimengerti. Hindari penggunaan kata yang tidak tepat dan fokus pada alasan yang jelas mengapa membandingkan harga penting.

예시: Yes, I always compare prices when I shop because I want to make sure I get the best deal. Comparing prices helps me save money while still getting good quality products.

제안: Perluas jawaban dengan memberikan alasan atau contoh untuk membuat jawaban lebih lengkap dan menarik. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan hindari penggunaan kata pengisi seperti 'yeah'.

예시: No, I don't find it difficult to make choices when I shop because I usually buy only what I need. For example, I make a list beforehand to avoid unnecessary purchases.

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur. Berikan contoh spesifik untuk mendukung pendapat agar jawaban lebih meyakinkan.

예시: I think it depends on the quality. Some cheaper products can be just as good as expensive ones, especially if they come from reliable brands. For instance, I once bought a budget smartphone that worked very well.

× I do really like an enjoy shopping.

✓ I really like and enjoy shopping.

The article 'an' is incorrectly used before the verb 'enjoy'. The correct structure is to use 'like and enjoy' without any article. This is a singular and plural issue because 'an' is used before singular countable nouns, not verbs.

× I go shopping every. Month for manly shopping but if there is something urgent I can go shopping every week.

✓ I go shopping every month mainly, but if there is something urgent, I can go shopping every week.

The sentence has incorrect punctuation and word choice. 'Every.' should be 'every' without a period, and 'manly' is a misspelling of 'mainly'. Also, the sentence needs commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× I go shopping buy online and offline but I prefer online shopping.

✓ I go shopping both online and offline, but I prefer online shopping.

The phrase 'buy online and offline' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'both' to indicate two options, and 'buy' should be omitted as 'go shopping' already implies purchasing.

× I always compare prices when I shopped because yeah, I and I cannot make a woman and I need to compare an.

✓ I always compare prices when I shop because I cannot make a mistake and I need to compare.

The sentence incorrectly uses past tense 'shopped' with 'always', which requires present tense. Also, 'make a woman' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo for 'make a mistake'. Modal verb 'cannot' is used correctly but the sentence structure is confusing.

× I need to make sure that I get the same fidelity facilities with the lower price.

✓ I need to make sure that I get the same quality with a lower price.

The phrase 'fidelity facilities' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'quality'. Also, 'the lower price' should be 'a lower price' to indicate any price that is lower.

× I don't really feel difficult about it because I will buy what I need, yeah.

✓ I don't really find it difficult because I buy what I need, yeah.

The verb 'feel' is incorrectly used with the adjective 'difficult'. The correct expression is 'find it difficult'. Also, 'will buy' is changed to 'buy' to match the habitual action.

× It depends on the quality there is.

✓ It depends on the quality.

The phrase 'there is' is unnecessary and incorrect here. The sentence is clearer and grammatically correct without it.

× There are some products that cheaper than the expensive product but it has a good quality good.

✓ There are some products that are cheaper than the expensive products but have good quality.

The sentence has singular and plural mismatches: 'products' plural with 'product' singular, and 'has' with plural subject. Also, 'good quality good' is redundant and incorrect.

× It depends on the brand. I think there are many cheaper brands that it has good quality then.

✓ It depends on the brand. I think there are many cheaper brands that have good quality too.

The conjunction 'then' is incorrectly used; 'too' or 'also' is appropriate here. Also, 'it has' should be 'that have' to agree with plural 'brands'.