Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences complete and avoid unnecessary pauses. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and be specific about what you like to shop for. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy shopping because it helps me relax and socialize with friends. Sometimes, when I feel stressed, I go window shopping just for fun. Additionally, I like to buy stationery items as I find them useful for my studies.

제안: Your answer has several grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use correct sentence structures and clearer vocabulary. Use linking words like 'because' or 'therefore' to explain your reasons logically. Also, be specific about how you compare prices and why it is important.

예시: Yes, I always compare prices because I learned this habit from my parents. It helps me save money and stick to my budget. Moreover, I consider the quality of the material to decide if the price is worth paying.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains some errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct idioms like 'on the fence' and improve sentence flow with linking words such as 'however' and 'therefore'. Be more specific about your decision-making process when shopping.

예시: Yes, I am often on the fence when choosing clothing brands. However, I try to compare prices and the quality of materials before buying. Sometimes, despite my efforts, I end up purchasing items that are not satisfactory.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Avoid repeating the same idea multiple times. Use clear and concise sentences with proper linking words like 'because' or 'therefore'. Also, consider adding examples or exceptions to make your answer more balanced and natural.

예시: Yes, I believe expensive products are usually better because you get what you pay for. The quality of materials tends to be higher in costly items. However, sometimes cheaper products can also be good if you choose carefully.

× Yes, shopping is one of the activity which is relaxing and it also helps in socializing more overall.

✓ Yes, shopping is one of the activities which is relaxing and it also helps in socializing more overall.

The word 'activity' should be plural 'activities' because 'one of the' is followed by a plural noun. This is a common singular and plural agreement issue.

× I also go for window shopping sometimes when I am stressful just for fun.

✓ I also go window shopping sometimes when I am stressed just for fun.

The phrase 'go for window shopping' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'go window shopping'. Also, 'stressful' is an adjective describing something that causes stress, but here the speaker means to say they feel stress, so 'stressed' is correct.

× Additionally, I like to shop for. Things such as stationary. Which is.

✓ Additionally, I like to shop for things such as stationery.

The original sentence is fragmented and incomplete. 'Stationary' is incorrect spelling; the correct word is 'stationery' meaning writing materials. The sentence should be combined properly without unnecessary periods.

× Yes, it is one of the activity which I learned from my parents.

✓ Yes, it is one of the activities which I learned from my parents.

Again, 'activity' should be plural 'activities' after 'one of the' to maintain correct singular/plural agreement.

× Morrow work are also weigh out the pros and cons regarding the material which helps me too.

✓ Moreover, I also weigh out the pros and cons regarding the material which helps me too.

The phrase 'Morrow work are also weigh out' is incorrect and unclear. It seems the intended phrase is 'Moreover, I also weigh out'. Correct sentence structure and word choice are necessary.

× Determine or conclude the prices according to the material, whether it is worth of money or not.

✓ Determine or conclude the prices based on the material, whether it is worth the money or not.

The phrase 'worth of money' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'worth the money'. Also, 'according to' is better replaced with 'based on' in this context.

× Yes, I'm always on fence when it comes to clothing brands.

✓ Yes, I'm always on the fence when it comes to clothing brands.

The idiom is 'on the fence', so the definite article 'the' is necessary here.

× Most of the time I'm by things after comparing their prizes and the quality of the material, whether it is work for money, worth or value or not.

✓ Most of the time I buy things after comparing their prices and the quality of the material, whether it is worth the money or not.

'By things' is a typo; it should be 'buy things'. 'Prizes' is incorrect; the correct word is 'prices'. The phrase 'work for money, worth or value' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'worth the money'.

× So the quality of the material is directly proportional to the money you want base.

✓ So the quality of the material is directly proportional to the money you want to base it on.

The phrase 'money you want base' is incomplete and incorrect. It should be 'money you want to base it on' to correctly express the idea.

× Hence the expensive products are. Quite. Made-up of of quite good and they are made-up of good material.

✓ Hence, the expensive products are quite well made and they are made of good material.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains repeated words 'of of'. 'Made-up of' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'made of'. The sentence should be combined properly for clarity.