Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to use correct grammar and clearer sentence structure. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'Experian your lifestyle'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details about your shopping experience.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy shopping because it makes me feel excited and helps me experience different lifestyles. For example, on weekends, I often go to the local market with my mom where I can buy everything I need within my budget.

제안: Improve clarity and grammar. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to explain reasons. Avoid confusing phrases like 'come back right when I shop'. Be specific about how you compare prices.

예시: Yes, I usually compare prices when I shop because there are many similar products on sale. For example, before going to the market, I check online platforms to ensure I get good quality products at the right price.

제안: Work on sentence fluency and grammar. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' correctly. Provide more specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

예시: Yes, it is difficult for me to make choices when I shop because there are many similar products available. So, I try to choose the best quality products that are also affordable.

제안: Focus on clear and correct sentence structure. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words to compare ideas logically. Provide specific examples to support your opinion.

예시: No, I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones. Sometimes, expensive items are not good quality, while cheaper products from the local market can be well made and affordable.

× Yes, I really enjoy shopping because it made me feel excited and Experian your lifestyle.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy shopping because it makes me feel excited and experience your lifestyle.

The sentence mixes past tense 'made' with present tense context. Since the student is talking about a general feeling, present tense 'makes' is appropriate. Also, 'Experian' is a misspelling of 'experience'. Use present tense verbs to describe habitual actions or feelings.

× For example, on the weekend actually going to the market with my mom on where it is in a local so that I can buy everything I wanan use my budget.

✓ For example, on the weekend, I actually go to the market with my mom, which is local, so that I can buy everything I want within my budget.

The original sentence has incorrect prepositions and unclear phrasing. 'On where it is in a local' is incorrect; it should be 'which is local'. Also, 'wanan' is a misspelling of 'want to'. The sentence needs proper subject and verb to be complete.

× Yes, I usually come back right when I shop, especially when there are many similar products on sale.

✓ Yes, I usually compare prices when I shop, especially when there are many similar products on sale.

The phrase 'come back right when I shop' is incorrect and unclear. The question asks about comparing prices, so the correct verb is 'compare prices'. The preposition 'when' is used correctly here.

× For example, before we go to the market to buy something I did I have to check their platform to make sure I got the right value for my money and good quality.

✓ For example, before we go to the market to buy something, I have to check their platform to make sure I get the right value for my money and good quality.

The sentence incorrectly uses past tense 'did' and 'got' when describing habitual actions. Since the action is habitual or future, present tense 'have to' and 'get' should be used. Also, the sentence needs commas for clarity.

× Yes, I think it is very difficult for me to make choices when I shop because.

✓ Yes, I think it is very difficult for me to make choices when I shop because there are many products on sale.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'because' without completing the reason. It needs a complete clause after 'because' to explain why it is difficult.

× In the shop there are many products on sale, sometime it is similar.

✓ In the shop, there are many products on sale; sometimes they are similar.

'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'It is similar' is incorrect because 'products' is plural; use 'they are similar'.

× So I need to choose the best quality of products and is not as expensive.

✓ So I need to choose the best quality products that are not too expensive.

The conjunction 'and' is incorrectly used to connect clauses without a subject. The sentence needs a relative clause 'that are not too expensive' to describe the products.

× No, I don't say expensive for that all way better than cheaper one.

✓ No, I don't say expensive products are always better than cheaper ones.

The sentence misuses pronouns and articles. 'For that all way' is incorrect; it should be 'are always'. Also, 'cheaper one' should be plural 'cheaper ones' to match 'products'.

× Some expensive but that is not good.

✓ Some expensive products are not good.

The sentence lacks a verb and subject agreement. It should be a complete sentence with subject 'Some expensive products' and verb 'are'.

× It is so expensive but the cheaper one in the local market is from man made and it is to serve the budget as well.

✓ It is very expensive, but the cheaper ones in the local market are handmade and also serve the budget well.

The sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect article use. 'Man made' should be 'handmade'. 'One' should be plural 'ones' to match 'cheaper'. The phrase 'it is to serve the budget' is unclear; better to say 'serve the budget well'.