Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid phrases like 'spend some college time alone' which is unclear. Instead, directly state that you enjoy shopping alone as it helps you relax. Also, keep your answer within 3-4 sentences for effectiveness.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy shopping. I often prefer to shop alone because it helps me relax and focus on what I need without distractions.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but is a bit wordy and slightly unclear. Try to use simpler and more direct language. Use linking words like 'because' to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and keep sentences concise.

예시: Yes, I usually compare prices because it helps me understand which brand offers the best value. This way, I can spend my money wisely.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete, especially the last sentence. Make sure to complete your thoughts and use correct grammar. Also, provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words like 'because'.

예시: No, it is usually easy for me to make choices when I shop because I know my body type and which clothes fit me well.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Avoid vague words like 'project' when you mean 'product'. Use clear sentence structures and linking words like 'however' or 'but' to contrast ideas. Try to be more specific and concise.

예시: I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones. Some affordable products have good quality, while some expensive brands may not look as good.

× I usually like to spend some college time alone while I'm shopping as it helps me relax.

✓ I usually like to spend some quiet time alone while I'm shopping as it helps me relax.

The phrase 'college time' is incorrect in this context. The student likely meant 'quiet time' or 'some time alone'. Using the correct preposition and noun phrase improves clarity.

× I do usually compare prices while I'm shopping because I like to have information about which brand is setting what product at what price as it helps me gain better understanding of how I'm supposed to spend my money.

✓ I usually compare prices while I'm shopping because I like to have information about which brand is selling which product at what price as it helps me gain a better understanding of how I'm supposed to spend my money.

The phrase 'setting what product at what price' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'selling'. Also, 'gain better understanding' needs the article 'a' before 'better understanding'. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× No, it is not usually that difficult to make choices when I shop because I know what kind of a body type I have and what a particular clothes fit. My type of body and I.

✓ No, it is not usually that difficult to make choices when I shop because I know what kind of body type I have and what particular clothes fit me.

The sentence has structural issues: 'what a particular clothes fit' is incorrect because 'clothes' is plural and does not take 'a'. Also, 'My type of body and I.' is a fragment and unclear. The correction combines ideas into a coherent sentence and uses correct noun and pronoun forms.

× My type of body and I.

✓ This sentence is unnecessary and should be removed.

'My type of body and I.' is a fragment and does not convey a clear meaning. It should be removed to improve sentence clarity.

× I believe this question is kind of controversial because it depends on the project. Some projects even though the cheaper they have really good quality and some products if their high end brand products, they obviously to have very good quality but the look might not be that great.

✓ I believe this question is kind of controversial because it depends on the product. Some products, even though they are cheaper, have really good quality, and some products, if they are high-end brand products, obviously have very good quality but the look might not be that great.

The word 'project' is incorrect; it should be 'product'. The sentence structure is confusing and contains pronoun errors such as 'their' instead of 'they are' and 'to have' instead of 'have'. The correction clarifies meaning and corrects pronoun usage.