Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ให้ถูกต้องและเหมาะสม เช่น ใช้คำว่า 'countries' แทน 'country' และ 'clothing stores' แทน 'clothing store' รวมถึงแก้ไขคำผิดและใช้ linking words เพื่อความลื่นไหลของประโยค

예시: Yes, I enjoy shopping a lot because it allows me to explore many different products from various countries. For example, I like visiting clothing stores since I am really into fashion and enjoy seeing many clothing pieces like shoes, jackets, and pants. It's truly fascinating and mesmerizing.

제안: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ให้ถูกต้อง เช่น 'stores' แทน 'story' และใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมประโยคให้ลื่นไหล รวมถึงหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำและคำที่ไม่เหมาะสม

예시: Yes, I do compare prices when I shop because I want to buy items at the lowest price possible. Therefore, I visit multiple stores that sell the same type of product to see if one store offers a cheaper price than another, and then I decide which one to buy from.

제안: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ให้ถูกต้อง เช่น 'shops' แทน 'sharp' และ 'stores' แทน 'store' รวมถึงใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมประโยคและทำให้คำตอบมีความชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติ

예시: Yes, I often find it difficult to make choices when shopping, especially if the item I want costs all my savings. Because of this, I usually spend a lot of time comparing prices at different stores to find the best deal. With this approach, I can buy the item I want at the cheapest price.

제안: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ให้ถูกต้อง เช่น 'Not necessarily' แทน 'Not necessary' และ 'expensive products often use' แทน 'expensive product often use' รวมถึงใช้ linking words เพื่อความลื่นไหลและความชัดเจนของคำตอบ

예시: Not necessarily, because expensive products often use higher quality materials and advanced technology. However, some items can offer similar functionality at lower costs. For example, some budget smartphones perform almost as well as premium models, making them a practical choice for many people. Ultimately, the value depends on the specific product and individual needs rather than just the price.

× I enjoy shopping quite a lot because it allows me to explore a lot of different products from various country.

✓ I enjoy shopping quite a lot because it allows me to explore a lot of different products from various countries.

The word 'country' should be plural 'countries' because it refers to multiple places, not just one. In English, when referring to more than one, the plural form is required.

× For example, I like visiting clothing store because for me I'm really into fashion and getting to see a lot of coding pieces like shoes, jacket, pants.

✓ For example, I like visiting clothing stores because for me I'm really into fashion and getting to see a lot of clothing pieces like shoes, jackets, pants.

The word 'store' should be plural 'stores' because it refers to multiple shops. Also, 'coding pieces' is incorrect; it should be 'clothing pieces'. Additionally, 'jacket' should be plural 'jackets' to match the list of items.

× It's just fascinating an really mesmerizing.

✓ It's just fascinating and really mesmerizing.

The word 'an' is a typo and should be 'and' to correctly connect the two adjectives describing the experience.

× So I go to multiple story that stay with the same type of product and see if one store has a cheaper price of product then another an decide which one I would buy.

✓ So I go to multiple stores that stay with the same type of product and see if one store has a cheaper price of product than another and decide which one I would buy.

'Story' should be plural 'stores' to indicate multiple shops. Also, 'then' should be 'than' for comparison, and 'an' should be 'and' to connect clauses.

× I often find it difficult to make choices when the sharp, especially if the item I want 'cause all my saving.

✓ I often find it difficult to make choices when shopping, especially if the item I want costs all my savings.

'Sharp' is a typo and should be 'shopping'. The phrase 'cause all my saving' is incorrect; it should be 'costs all my savings' to express the item's price relative to savings.

× Because of this, I usually spend a lot of times comparing prices at the different store to find the best deal for me.

✓ Because of this, I usually spend a lot of time comparing prices at different stores to find the best deal for me.

'Times' should be singular 'time' because 'a lot of' is followed by an uncountable noun here. 'The different store' should be 'different stores' to indicate multiple shops.

× And with this approach I can buy the item that I want at the cheapest.

✓ And with this approach I can buy the item that I want at the cheapest price.

The phrase 'at the cheapest' is incomplete; it should be 'at the cheapest price' to be grammatically correct.

× Not necessary why expensive product often use higher quality material and advanced technology.

✓ Not necessarily, because expensive products often use higher quality materials and advanced technology.

'Not necessary why' is incorrect; it should be 'Not necessarily, because'. 'Product' should be plural 'products' to match the context. 'Material' should be plural 'materials'.

× She will item can sometimes offers similar functionality at lower costs.

✓ Some items can sometimes offer similar functionality at lower costs.

'She will item' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'Some items'. Also, 'offers' should be 'offer' to agree with plural subject 'items'.