Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but can be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating 'shopping' and try to use more varied vocabulary. Also, try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy shopping. I usually go on weekends and like to buy clothes and perfumes that catch my eye.

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points logically. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure.

예시: Yes, I always compare prices because sometimes clothes are cheaper in smaller shops, whereas malls tend to have higher prices.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be more concise and natural. Try to avoid repeating 'budget' and use linking words to make your answer flow better.

예시: Yes, it can be difficult to choose because there are many attractive products, but I always prioritize those that fit within my budget.

제안: Your answer has some inappropriate expressions and lacks coherence. Avoid mentioning 'poor ones' as it may sound insensitive. Instead, focus on quality and value. Use linking words to support your opinion clearly.

예시: I don't believe expensive products are always better because sometimes cheaper items offer good quality and value for money.

× Yes, I'm a shopaholic person and I usually go on weekends to do shopping and I buy many clothes and some perfumes that I like.

✓ Yes, I'm a shopaholic person and I usually go on weekends to do shopping and I buy many pieces of clothing and some perfumes that I like.

The word 'clothes' is plural and uncountable in this context, so it should be replaced with 'pieces of clothing' to correctly express quantity.

× Yes, I usually compare prices when I shop as if I visit the another shop the the price of the clothes is very less, but in the if I go to the malls the price of products was very heavy.

✓ Yes, I usually compare prices when I shop because if I visit another shop, the price of the clothes is much lower, but if I go to the malls, the price of products is very high.

The sentence had incorrect prepositions and articles such as 'the another shop' and 'in the if'. Also, 'very less' is incorrect; 'much lower' is appropriate. 'Price of products was very heavy' is incorrect; 'price is very high' is correct.

× Yes, I usually compare prices when I shop as if I visit the another shop the the price of the clothes is very less, but in the if I go to the malls the price of products was very heavy.

✓ Yes, I usually compare prices when I shop because if I visit another shop, the price of the clothes is much lower, but if I go to the malls, the price of products is very high.

The conjunctions 'as if' and 'in the if' are incorrectly used. 'Because if' and 'but if' are the correct conjunctions to express cause and contrast.

× Yes, I usually compare prices when I shop as if I visit the another shop the the price of the clothes is very less, but in the if I go to the malls the price of products was very heavy.

✓ Yes, I usually compare prices when I shop because if I visit another shop, the price of the clothes is much lower, but if I go to the malls, the price of products is very high.

The sentence incorrectly uses past tense 'was' for a habitual action. Present tense 'is' should be used to indicate general truth or habit.

× Yes, of course, it is difficult for me to make choices when I shop because there are many beautiful products that I want to purchase, but according to my budget, I want to choose that first fit for my budget.

✓ Yes, of course, it is difficult for me to make choices when I shop because there are many beautiful products that I want to purchase, but according to my budget, I want to choose the one that first fits my budget.

The phrase 'choose that first fit for my budget' is incorrect. It should be 'choose the one that first fits my budget' to correctly use the relative pronoun and verb agreement.

× According to me, I do not think that expensive products are always superior than low cost ones, because some cheaper ones are better than expensive products and they are usually used by poor ones.

✓ In my opinion, I do not think that expensive products are always superior to low-cost ones, because some cheaper ones are better than expensive products and they are usually used by poor people.

'According to me' is incorrect; 'In my opinion' is appropriate. 'Superior than' should be 'superior to'. 'Low cost' should be hyphenated as 'low-cost'. 'Poor ones' is incorrect; 'poor people' is correct.