Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、「I want to go to the physical store instead of the online shopping」は「I prefer shopping in physical stores rather than online shopping」のように自然な表現に改善できます。また、内容をより具体的にし、冗長な表現を避けることが必要です。

예시: Yes, I enjoy shopping, especially in physical stores rather than online. I find it relaxing and a good way to refresh myself after a busy day.

제안: 回答は質問に答えていますが、意味が不明瞭な部分や文法の誤りがあります。例えば、「what about there is in the goods」は不自然で、具体的に「what features the goods have」などと表現すべきです。内容を明確にし、論理的なつながりを持たせるために接続詞を使うことも重要です。

예시: Yes, I often compare prices because it helps me understand the quality and features of the products, which I find interesting.

제안: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法や語彙の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。例えば、「my wife will me and likes to choose which one the better is」は不自然で、「my wife usually helps me choose the better option」のように言い換える必要があります。話の流れを整理し、簡潔に述べることが求められます。

예시: Yes, I find it hard to make decisions when shopping, so my wife usually helps me choose the better option. She often takes the initiative, especially when we go to restaurants.

제안: 回答は質問に答えていますが、表現が不自然で意味が曖昧です。「accepting silver products」は意味不明で、「buying high-quality products」などに置き換えるべきです。また、理由を明確にし、論理的に説明することが必要です。

예시: No, I don't think expensive products are always better. However, sometimes buying high-quality items is worth the price because they last longer and satisfy me more.

× I want to go to the physical store instead of the online shopping.

✓ I want to go to a physical store instead of shopping online.

'The online shopping' is incorrect because 'shopping' here is an uncountable activity and does not need 'the'. Also, 'physical store' should not have 'the' unless referring to a specific one. The preposition 'to' is not needed before 'shopping online'.

× I think the shopping time is very comfortable for me, especially with my life.

✓ I think shopping time is very comfortable for me, especially with my lifestyle.

'The shopping time' is unnatural; 'shopping time' without 'the' is better. 'Especially with my life' is unclear; 'with my lifestyle' or 'in my life' is more appropriate.

× For me, it is very important time for me to relax and be refreshed.

✓ For me, it is a very important time to relax and be refreshed.

The phrase 'important time for me' is redundant; 'a very important time' suffices. Also, 'for me' is repeated unnecessarily.

× I often compare the prices of the goods in the shop and that's mainly because comparing the prices makes me understand what about there is in the goods and this is very enjoyable for me.

✓ I often compare the prices of goods in the shop, and that's mainly because comparing prices helps me understand what is in the goods, which is very enjoyable for me.

'What about there is in the goods' is incorrect; it should be 'what is in the goods'. Also, 'the goods' is better without 'the' unless specific goods are meant. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× I'm not good at making any decisions, uh, when I go to the shopping, uh S so umm, my wife will me and likes to choose which one the better is.

✓ I'm not good at making decisions when I go shopping, so my wife helps me and likes to choose which one is better.

'Go to the shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'go shopping'. 'Will me' is incorrect; likely meant 'helps me'. 'Which one the better is' should be 'which one is better'.

× So uh always she has a initiative in the shopping when we go to a restaurant.

✓ So, she always takes the initiative when we go shopping or to a restaurant.

'Has a initiative' is incorrect; it should be 'takes the initiative'. 'In the shopping' is unnatural; 'when we go shopping' is better. Also, 'go to a restaurant' is fine but contextually 'or to a restaurant' fits better.

× Sometimes I'm buying, accepting silver products is really a good choice.

✓ Sometimes I buy silver products; accepting them is really a good choice.

'I'm buying' is present continuous and awkward here; simple present 'I buy' is better. 'Accepting silver products' is unclear; 'accepting them' clarifies the meaning.

× If you spend a lot of money, you can be a satisfied with this action, so it is effective.

✓ If you spend a lot of money, you can be satisfied with this action, so it is effective.

'Be a satisfied' is incorrect; 'be satisfied' is correct. The article 'a' should be removed before 'satisfied'.