Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is quite natural and effective, but try to avoid redundancy such as repeating 'I do enjoy shopping' and 'I consider myself a shopaholic' which convey similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Try to be more concise and clear.

예시: Yes, I enjoy shopping because I consider myself a shopaholic. For instance, every week I order various items like clothes, footwear, and electronic gadgets. Recently, I bought an iPad that I had wanted for a long time.

제안: Your answer has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Avoid using 'although' and 'but' together. Also, use linking words properly and check subject-verb agreement. Try to be more specific and clear in your explanation.

예시: Although I enjoy shopping, I am also economical. Therefore, I compare prices of items on different websites to get an overview of their selling prices.

제안: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions, such as 'favorite activity' (should be 'favorite activities') and 'choose anything between 2:00' which is confusing. Try to use clearer and more precise language and link your ideas logically.

예시: Not at all, because shopping is one of my favourite activities. Before buying anything, I consider current trends and my personal style, so choosing between options is easy for me.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors such as subject-verb agreement and missing articles. Also, try to use linking words like 'however' to improve coherence. Be more specific in your examples.

예시: Well, I do not agree with this notion because many brands offer good quality products at reasonable prices. However, some high-end brands sell the same products at higher prices.

× Although I am a shopaholic person but on the same time I am economical as well.

✓ Although I am a shopaholic person, at the same time I am economical as well.

The sentence incorrectly uses both 'Although' and 'but' together, which is redundant. 'Although' is a subordinating conjunction and should not be combined with 'but'. The correct conjunction to use here is 'at the same time' with a comma after the subordinate clause to connect the ideas properly.

× It give me the overview of the the item selling on the different websites.

✓ It gives me the overview of the item selling on the different websites.

The subject 'It' is singular, so the verb should be 'gives' instead of 'give' to agree in number. Also, there was a repeated word 'the' which has been corrected.

× shopping is one of my favorite activity.

✓ shopping is one of my favorite activities.

The phrase 'one of my favorite' should be followed by a plural noun 'activities' because it refers to one item among many.

× So while shopping any item I do compare their prices on the different websites.

✓ So while shopping for any item, I do compare its prices on different websites.

The preposition 'for' is needed after 'shopping' to indicate the object of shopping. Also, 'their' should be 'its' to agree with the singular noun 'item'. The article 'the' before 'different websites' is unnecessary and has been removed.

× there are number of brands available in the market which offers you the good quality products at reasonable prices

✓ there are a number of brands available in the market which offer you good quality products at reasonable prices

The phrase 'a number of brands' is plural, so the verb should be 'offer' instead of 'offers' to agree with the plural subject 'brands'. Also, 'the good quality products' is better as 'good quality products' without 'the'.

× there are also some high end brands which gives same products at higher prices.

✓ there are also some high end brands which give the same products at higher prices.

The plural subject 'brands' requires the plural verb 'give' instead of 'gives'. Also, 'same products' should be 'the same products' to specify particular products.