Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 문법 오류와 중복 표현이 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'makes me get rid of stress' 대신 'it helps me relieve stress'로 표현하는 것이 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 문장을 5문장 이내로 간결하게 유지하는 것이 좋습니다.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy shopping because it excites me. After a long day at work, it helps me relieve stress. I find it refreshing and fun. Shopping also allows me to explore new products. Overall, it's a great way to relax.

제안: 답변이 길고 중복된 부분이 있습니다. 'because since I am a student'는 중복된 의미를 포함하고 있어 하나로 줄이는 것이 좋습니다. 또한, 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 구성하고, 연결어를 사용하여 논리적인 흐름을 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: Yes, I always compare prices because I am a student with a limited budget. Therefore, I try to find the most affordable options. This helps me manage my expenses wisely.

제안: 답변에 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'which is essential and which is and luxury things'는 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 명확하게 재구성하고, 연결어를 사용하여 내용을 논리적으로 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: Yes, I often find it hard to make choices when shopping. Since I have a limited budget, I need to decide which items are essential and which are luxury. This makes the decision-making process challenging.

제안: 답변이 미완성이고 문장이 끊겨 있습니다. 또한, 반복적인 표현과 문법 오류가 있습니다. 답변을 완성하고, 명확한 이유와 예시를 포함하여 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: No, I don't think expensive products are always better. Sometimes, cheaper products can be of higher quality. For example, some luxury items are expensive mainly because of their brand name, not necessarily their functionality.

× Every time I shop I feel really excited and makes me get rid of stress after a long day of work.

✓ Every time I shop, I feel really excited and it makes me get rid of stress after a long day of work.

The verb 'makes' needs a subject that agrees with the third person singular form. In the original sentence, 'makes' incorrectly follows 'I feel really excited' without a proper subject. Adding 'it' as the subject before 'makes' corrects the sentence structure.

× Yes, I always compare prices when I shop because since I am a student I don't have enough budget to buy anything I want to buy so I always compare that which would be more affordable.

✓ Yes, I always compare prices when I shop because, since I am a student, I don't have enough budget to buy everything I want, so I always compare which would be more affordable.

The original sentence uses multiple conjunctions ('because', 'since', 'so') without proper punctuation and structure, causing confusion. Adding commas and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× There are so many things that I want to buy but as I have a limited budget I need to compare the things which is essential and which is and luxury things.

✓ There are so many things that I want to buy, but as I have a limited budget, I need to compare which things are essential and which are luxury items.

The original sentence misuses 'which is' and 'which is and luxury things'. Correct pronoun usage requires plural agreement ('which things are') and clearer phrasing ('luxury items'). Adding commas also improves readability.