Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: حاول أن تجعل إجاباتك أكثر تنظيمًا وطبيعية، وابتعد عن التكرار. استخدم جملًا واضحة ومترابطة مع تفاصيل محددة دون الإطالة.

예시: Yes, I enjoy shopping, especially online because it's very convenient. I usually shop once a day and spend most of my money on perfumes and shoes.

제안: حاول استخدام جمل أكثر وضوحًا وترتيبًا مع ربط الأفكار باستخدام أدوات الربط، وابتعد عن الأخطاء النحوية لتوضيح السبب بشكل أفضل.

예시: I didn't compare prices in the past, but now I do because I want to save money. I have learned that not all products are worth the same price, so I try to find the best deals.

제안: حاول التعبير عن أفكارك بشكل أكثر سلاسة واستخدم أدوات الربط لتوضيح السبب والنتيجة، مع تجنب التكرار.

예시: Yes, I find it difficult to make choices when shopping, especially for clothes. Therefore, I usually shop with my friends who help me decide what looks better.

제안: حاول استخدام مفردات دقيقة وتجنب الأخطاء اللغوية، ووضح رأيك مع أمثلة محددة دون تكرار.

예시: I believe expensive products are often better because they usually have higher quality. For example, I prefer to buy clothes and perfumes that may cost more but last longer.

× So I really spend my money in perfumes and shows especially.

✓ So I really spend my money on perfumes and shoes especially.

The word 'shows' is incorrect here; the correct plural form is 'shoes' when referring to footwear. Also, the preposition 'in' should be 'on' when talking about spending money on items.

× Really in the past I do not, but now I do because I have my own money.

✓ Really, in the past I did not, but now I do because I have my own money.

The sentence refers to a past action, so the auxiliary verb should be in the past tense 'did not' instead of 'do not'.

× Why I do that? To just save my money.

✓ Why do I do that? To just save my money.

In questions, the auxiliary verb 'do' should come before the subject 'I'. The original sentence has incorrect word order.

× OK, I just learned that not all things can I buy it by this price I should buy it.

✓ OK, I just learned that I cannot buy all things at this price; I should buy them at a better price.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and redundant pronouns. 'Can I buy it' is incorrect; it should be 'I cannot buy'. Also, 'by this price' should be 'at this price'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Yes of course it's so difficult to me so I just do shopping with my friends to help me to choose what is better and what is more beautiful, especially in clothes.

✓ Yes, of course it's so difficult for me, so I just go shopping with my friends to help me choose what is better and what is more beautiful, especially clothes.

The preposition 'to' should be 'for' after 'difficult'. Also, 'do shopping' is better expressed as 'go shopping'. The phrase 'help me to choose' can be simplified to 'help me choose'. 'In clothes' is better as 'especially clothes'.

× I really have like difficulty choices with that type of things.

✓ I really have difficulty choosing with that type of thing.

'Difficulty choices' is incorrect; it should be 'difficulty choosing'. Also, 'that type of things' should be 'that type of thing' because 'type' is singular.

× Yes I do because sometimes the the expensive products is more quality friendships.

✓ Yes, I do because sometimes the expensive products are of better quality.

'Products' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. The phrase 'more quality friendships' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'of better quality'.

× So when it comes to clothes I like to spend my money with something quality.

✓ So when it comes to clothes, I like to spend my money on something of quality.

The preposition 'with' is incorrect here; it should be 'on'. Also, 'something quality' should be 'something of quality'.