Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid redundancy. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy shopping, especially for clothes because I like to keep up with the latest trends. Shopping is also a relaxing activity for me, and it always makes me happy.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Focus on giving a direct response with clear reasons and avoid hesitation sounds. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and complete your thoughts.

예시: Yes, I always compare prices, especially for expensive items, to make sure I get good value for my money. For example, I often check online prices before buying to find the best deal.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and contains filler words. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and finish your thoughts fully.

예시: Yes, it can be difficult to make choices when shopping because there are many options available. However, I usually decide based on the quality and price of the products.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete with many hesitations. Provide a clear opinion with reasons and examples. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid repeating phrases.

예시: I don't think expensive products are always better. Sometimes, cheaper products can offer better satisfaction. I usually compare the quality and value of items rather than just their price.

× Shopping makes me feel so happy and I love to buy clothes mostly because I love to be with the trend always.

✓ Shopping makes me feel so happy and I mostly love buying clothes because I love to always be with the trend.

The phrase 'love to buy clothes mostly' is awkward and incorrect in this context. The verb 'love' is better followed by the gerund form 'buying' when expressing general preferences. Also, adverb placement is improved by placing 'mostly' before 'love buying clothes' and 'always' before 'be with the trend' for natural English word order.

× So it's a kind of, uh, relaxing point for me when I'm going to do shopping as I always enjoy doing.

✓ So it's a kind of, uh, relaxing point for me when I go shopping as I always enjoy doing it.

The phrase 'when I'm going to do shopping' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'when I go shopping'. Also, 'enjoy doing' is incomplete and should be 'enjoy doing it' to specify the activity.

× Yes, I always compare prices when buying things, specially expensive items, whether that umm, whether the item gives worth the amount that I spend so far for that and also for example when I'm looking for something really expensive, I used to check in the online things and also this will avoid my.

✓ Yes, I always compare prices when buying things, especially expensive items, to see whether the item is worth the amount I have spent so far. Also, for example, when I'm looking for something really expensive, I usually check online, and this also helps me avoid mistakes.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'specially' should be 'especially'; 'whether that umm, whether the item gives worth' is awkward and incorrect; 'used to check in the online things' is incorrect, should be 'usually check online'; 'this will avoid my' is incomplete and unclear. Prepositions like 'in the online things' are incorrect; 'online' is used without 'in' or 'the'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.

× So at this point I will chapter choose, but according to the quality price and.

✓ So at this point, I will choose carefully, based on the quality and price.

The phrase 'I will chapter choose' is incorrect and unclear; likely a mispronunciation or error. It should be 'I will choose carefully'. Also, 'according to the quality price and' is incomplete and should be 'based on the quality and price'. The pronoun and phrase usage is corrected for clarity.

× Uh, I think not really. Expensive products always won't give the always won't satisfy, but sometimes cheaper ones may be. May will give the best satisfaction that rather than the expensive product always I will compare the quality of the product and the value of it rather than the.

✓ Uh, I don't really think so. Expensive products don't always satisfy, but sometimes cheaper ones may give better satisfaction. I always compare the quality and value of the product rather than just the price.

The original sentence misuses modal verbs like 'always won't give' and 'may will give', which are incorrect combinations. 'Always won't' should be 'don't always', and 'may will' is not a valid modal combination. The sentence is rephrased for grammatical correctness and clarity, using appropriate modal verbs and sentence structure.