Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear but has some redundancy and minor grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating words and keep sentences concise. Also, use linking words to make your answer more natural.

예시: Yes, I love shopping. I usually go shopping on weekends, mostly with my friends, which makes it more enjoyable.

제안: Your answer has some repetition and unclear phrasing. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words and avoid repeating words. Also, be more specific about your reasons.

예시: Yes, I always compare prices because items are usually cheaper outside the mall. Therefore, I check prices first and buy only when I find a good deal.

제안: Your answer is understandable but has some incomplete sentences and repetition. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your thoughts.

예시: Yes, it is difficult for me to make choices because I often find many interesting items and cannot decide on just one.

제안: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas logically, avoid repetition, and use specific examples to support your opinion.

예시: I don't think expensive products are always better. Sometimes cheaper items may look less attractive but can be more durable than expensive ones.

× I often go for shopping in the weekends and mostly I go with my with my friends.

✓ I often go shopping on the weekends and mostly I go with my friends.

The phrase 'go for shopping' is incorrect; the correct form is 'go shopping' because 'go' is followed by the verb in -ing form without 'for'. Also, 'in the weekends' should be 'on the weekends' as 'on' is the correct preposition for days and weekends.

× I often go for shopping in the weekends and mostly I go with my with my friends.

✓ I often go shopping on the weekends and mostly I go with my friends.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to weekends; the correct preposition is 'on'. Also, the phrase 'with my with my friends' has a repetition error; it should be 'with my friends'.

× Yes I compare prices when I shop because the cheapest thing you get outside outside but in the mall you get it more expensive.

✓ Yes, I compare prices when I shop because the cheapest things you get outside, but in the mall, you get them more expensively.

The sentence has incorrect use of 'outside outside' (repetition) and 'more expensive' used incorrectly as an adverb. 'More expensively' is the correct adverb form. Also, 'thing' should be plural 'things' to match the context.

× Yes I compare prices when I shop because the cheapest thing you get outside outside but in the mall you get it more expensive.

✓ Yes, I compare prices when I shop because the cheapest things you get outside, but in the mall, you get them more expensively.

The word 'thing' should be plural 'things' because it refers to multiple items. Also, pronouns should agree in number with their antecedents.

× So I compare the prices 1st and I then I only buy thing.

✓ So I compare the prices first and then I only buy the thing.

The word 'thing' should be preceded by the definite article 'the' to specify the item. Also, '1st' should be written as 'first' in formal writing.

× So I compare the prices 1st and I then I only buy thing.

✓ So I compare the prices first and then I only buy the thing.

The sentence lacks the definite article 'the' before 'thing' to specify the object. Also, the phrase 'I then I' is redundant; it should be 'then I'.

× It is difficult for me to make choices when I shop because I can. I cannot stick to one thing, one item which I have seen, so it's very hard to make a decision from there.

✓ It is difficult for me to make choices when I shop because I cannot stick to one thing or one item that I have seen, so it's very hard to make a decision.

The sentence has a fragment 'because I can.' which is incomplete and confusing. It should be removed or corrected. Also, 'which' should be 'that' for restrictive clauses, and 'from there' is unnecessary.

× I don't think expensive products are always better better than the cheapest 1, because expensive are those which are embedded in looking in the looks of it items.

✓ I don't think expensive products are always better than the cheapest ones, because expensive products are those which are valued for their appearance.

The repetition 'better better' is an error. 'Cheapest 1' should be 'cheapest ones' to refer to plural items. The phrase 'embedded in looking in the looks of it items' is unclear and incorrect; it is corrected to 'valued for their appearance' for clarity.

× I don't think expensive products are always better better than the cheapest 1, because expensive are those which are embedded in looking in the looks of it items.

✓ I don't think expensive products are always better than the cheapest ones, because expensive products are those which are valued for their appearance.

The phrase 'cheapest 1' is incorrect; it should be 'cheapest ones' to match plural 'products'. Also, 'expensive' as a noun is incorrect; it should be 'expensive products'.

× But in the cheaper ones even the look is very bad. It is durable.

✓ But in the cheaper ones, even though the look is very bad, they are durable.

The sentence lacks proper conjunctions to connect ideas. 'It is durable' is incorrect because 'ones' is plural; it should be 'they are durable'. Adding 'even though' clarifies the contrast.