Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Use clear and simple sentences to express your feelings about shopping.

예시: Yes, I enjoy shopping because it lifts my mood and gives me a sense of happiness. Whenever I buy something, I feel excited to use it.

제안: Improve coherence by using linking words and make your explanation more specific. Also, avoid vague expressions like 'extra charges or money'.

예시: Yes, I always compare prices because sellers sometimes add hidden fees. For example, I feel disappointed when a product is expensive but the quality is poor.

제안: Use linking words to connect your ideas and clarify your points. Also, try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for better clarity.

예시: Yes, I find it hard to make choices because physical stores offer many options. As a result, I often hesitate before deciding what to buy.

제안: Work on grammar and sentence clarity. Provide a clear opinion with supporting reasons and use linking words to organize your answer logically.

예시: I believe expensive products are usually better, but not always. For instance, if I want something durable, I prefer to pay more because cheaper items might not last long.

× Yes, I do like shopping when because when I do shopping it makes my mood very energetic and makes me feel pleasure from inside.

✓ Yes, I do like shopping because when I shop, it makes my mood very energetic and makes me feel pleasure from inside.

The phrase 'when because when' is incorrect due to redundant conjunctions. Use 'because' alone to indicate reason. Also, 'do shopping' is better expressed as 'shop' for natural English usage.

× Whenever I buy anything or shop anything it makes me feel very great happy and I really wanted to use that product.

✓ Whenever I buy anything or shop for anything, it makes me feel very happy and I really want to use that product.

The verb 'shop' requires the preposition 'for' when followed by an object. Also, 'very great happy' is incorrect; 'very happy' suffices. 'Wanted' should be present tense 'want' to match the context.

× If I compare the product and the price, sometimes it makes me feel sad that the prices are much higher than the product quality.

✓ If I compare the product and the price, sometimes it makes me feel sad that the prices are much higher than the quality of the product.

The phrase 'than the product quality' is awkward; 'than the quality of the product' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I am a person who loves to shop from physical stores and when I visit a physical store or shop there is variety of options which makes me think second time.

✓ I am a person who loves to shop at physical stores, and when I visit a physical store or shop, there is a variety of options which makes me think twice.

Use 'at' with 'shop' to indicate location. 'There is variety' requires the article 'a' before 'variety'. 'Think second time' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'think twice'.

× If I need a product to in a long term then if I if it's cheaper then it may be sometimes not be able to focus on long term.

✓ If I need a product for the long term, then if it's cheaper, it may sometimes not be able to last long.

The phrase 'to in a long term' is incorrect; it should be 'for the long term'. The sentence structure is confusing and redundant; simplifying it improves clarity. 'May be sometimes not be able to focus on long term' is unclear; 'may sometimes not be able to last long' conveys the intended meaning better.