Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid small grammar mistakes (a friends → a friend / friends), and reduce repetition (usually used twice). Add one specific detail about why you like shopping to enrich the answer and use a linking word.

예시: Yes, I enjoy shopping. I usually go with a friend to Coco Park, a large mall near my home, because it has lots of clothing stores and a good supermarket. For example, I often buy clothes and daily essentials like shampoo and toothpaste there.

제안: Good direct answer and reason. Improve by using a natural tense (I compare rather than I will compare) and add a specific example or linking word to make it more concrete.

예시: Yes, I compare prices before I buy because it helps me save money and get better quality. For instance, I often check two online stores and the supermarket app to find the best deal before I purchase clothes or electronics.

제안: Short, disfluent and with sentence fragments. Give a clear topic sentence, connect ideas with linking words, correct word order and reduce fragmentation. Add a specific example of a difficult choice to illustrate the point.

예시: Yes, sometimes I find it difficult to make choices because there are so many options. For example, when buying cereal I spend a long time comparing brands and ingredients before I decide.

제안: Answer is unclear and repetitive. Give a direct opinion, explain your reason with a linking word, and provide a specific example or contrast to support your view.

예시: No, I don't think expensive products are always better. While some costly items use higher-quality materials, cheaper brands can work just as well; for example, I once bought an affordable kitchen knife that stayed sharp longer than an expensive one.

× I usually go shopping with a friends at Coco Park which is a super mall near my home.

✓ I usually go shopping with friends at Coco Park, which is a super mall near my home.

ID 1: Singular and plural issue - 'a friends' is incorrect because 'friends' is plural and cannot be used with the singular article 'a'. Remove 'a' to make it 'with friends'. Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which is a super mall near my home' for clarity.

× We usually buy clothes and the daily items are such as shampoo.

✓ We usually buy clothes and daily items such as shampoo.

ID 22: Article errors / ID 26: Sentence structure errors - 'the daily items are such as shampoo' is awkward and uses an unnecessary definite article and copula. Combine into 'daily items such as shampoo' for correct and natural phrasing.

× Yes, I will compare the prices before I shop because it helps me save my money and purchase better goods.

✓ Yes, I compare prices before I shop because it helps me save money and buy better goods.

ID 6: Present tense issue and ID 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs - The question asks about habitual action, so use simple present 'compare' not 'will compare'. 'Save my money' is unnatural here; use 'save money'. 'Purchase better goods' is formal—'buy better goods' is more natural.

× Yes, sometimes it is a really difficult for me to. Buy items.

✓ Yes, sometimes it is really difficult for me to buy items.

ID 23: Sentence without a verb and ID 22: Article errors - The original is split incorrectly and contains an extra article 'a' before an adjective 'really difficult'. Remove 'a', join fragments, and use the infinitive 'to buy' to complete the verb phrase.

× Because there are too many choices in our supermarket.

✓ There are too many choices in our supermarket.

ID 26: Sentence structure errors - This fragment begins with 'Because' making it a dependent clause. Remove 'Because' or attach it to the previous sentence to form a complete sentence. Here removing it yields a clear independent sentence.

× No, I don't think so, because expensive products are always. More expensive than cheap products, which means it costs more money.

✓ No, I don't think so, because expensive products are not always better than cheaper ones; they are just more expensive, which means they cost more money.

ID 26: Sentence structure errors and ID 5: Past tense issue not applicable but multiple issues - Original has sentence fragments and incorrect punctuation ('are always.' followed by 'More expensive'). Also incorrect comparison objects and agreement: 'cheaper ones' is better than 'cheap products' to match 'ones'. Use 'they cost' for correct subject-verb agreement. Restructure to clarify meaning and maintain tense and agreement.