Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is informative but a bit lengthy and ends abruptly. Try to keep your response within 4-5 sentences and avoid incomplete sentences. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: I am self-employed and own a boutique, which I have been running since 2019. It provides a reliable income and fulfills my financial needs. Moreover, I am passionate about designing new clothes for my customers, which keeps me motivated.

Sugestão: Your answer has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use correct sentence structures and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Exemplo: I rent a shop about five kilometers from my house, which is convenient for both me and my customers to reach easily.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and has grammatical mistakes. Try to be more concise and use linking words to connect your points. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'many more' without examples.

Exemplo: Yes, it is a great place to work because there are many facilities nearby, such as supermarkets and shopping malls. Additionally, the area has low pollution, which makes it comfortable for everyone.

Sugestão: Your answer is incomplete and repetitive. Make sure to complete your sentences and avoid repeating the same ideas. Use linking words to add supporting details clearly.

Exemplo: Yes, I love working here and have been doing so for three years. The location is convenient, and there are many amenities nearby that benefit both me and my customers.

Sugestão: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and try to express your ideas clearly and concisely. Use linking words to explain your reasons logically.

Exemplo: I plan to go abroad to gain more knowledge about garment designs. As a fashion designer, it is important for me to learn about the latest trends and techniques to improve my work.

× It's my passion and I always try to make new designs for the customers and.

✓ It's my passion and I always try to make new designs for the customers.

The sentence ends with an unnecessary conjunction 'and' which makes it incomplete and incorrect in structure. Removing 'and' completes the sentence properly.

× I have I rent a shop in my vicinity which is located 5 kilometers far from my house and it is a convenient place for me and my customers to reach my shop easily.

✓ I have rented a shop in my vicinity which is located 5 kilometers from my house and it is a convenient place for me and my customers to reach my shop easily.

The phrase '5 kilometers far from' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'from' without 'far'. Also, 'I have I rent' is incorrect; it should be 'I have rented' to indicate past action continuing to present.

× because there are lot of facilities that are available around my shop such as supermarket, shopping malls and many more.

✓ because there are lots of facilities that are available around my shop such as supermarkets, shopping malls and many more.

The phrase 'lot of' should be 'lots of' or 'a lot of' when referring to plural countable nouns. Also, 'supermarket' should be plural 'supermarkets' to match the plural context.

× It is a good as well as there are less pollution around my shop.

✓ It is good as well as there is less pollution around my shop.

The phrase 'a good' is incomplete; 'good' is an adjective and does not need 'a' here. Also, 'less pollution' is correct but requires singular verb 'is' instead of 'are'.

× there are lot of amenities that are available around my shop and they.

✓ there are lots of amenities that are available around my shop.

The phrase 'lot of' should be 'lots of' for plural countable nouns. The sentence ends abruptly with 'and they' which is incomplete and should be removed.

× I made a plan to go abroad for my getting more information and knowledge about the designs of the garments.

✓ I have made a plan to go abroad to get more information and knowledge about garment designs.

The phrase 'for my getting' is incorrect; it should be 'to get'. Also, 'I made a plan' is better expressed as 'I have made a plan' to indicate recent intention. 'Designs of the garments' is better as 'garment designs' for natural phrasing.

× Uh, because uh, being fashion designer, it is a convenient and important for me to gain each and each and every information of the government.

✓ Because, as a fashion designer, it is convenient and important for me to gain every piece of information about the garments.

The phrase 'being fashion designer' lacks an article; it should be 'a fashion designer'. 'A convenient and important' should be 'convenient and important' without 'a' because these are adjectives describing the situation. 'Each and each and every information' is redundant and incorrect; 'every piece of information' is correct. 'Information of the government' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'information about the garments' fits the context better.