Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as "I have joined" instead of "I joined" and "I wanna" which is informal. Also, the answer is a bit long and slightly off-topic. Try to give a clear, concise response directly addressing the question, and then add relevant details using linking words.

Exemplo: I'm currently a university student, but I also work for a Japanese news agency that covers climate change and environmental issues. I joined the company ten years ago to gain more knowledge in this field.

Sugestão: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing, such as "make a conversations" and "one of the best of my." Try to use correct grammar and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: I work in central Tokyo, which is an ideal location for journalists. This is because we often need to meet important people like researchers, entrepreneurs, and politicians, so being centrally located helps a lot.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrases like "go to everywhere" and "the restaurant." Try to use more precise vocabulary and linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, it's a great place to work because it's close to Tokyo Station, which makes it easy to travel anywhere in the Kanto area by train. Moreover, after work, we can conveniently visit nearby bars and restaurants.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes, such as "Just start to finishing our jobs." Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points logically. Also, avoid vague phrases and be more specific.

Exemplo: Yes, I really like my workplace's location because it's close to well-known libraries and bookstores. This helps journalists like me to access valuable information related to politics and the arts after finishing our work.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like "search for other job opportunities such as energy or United Nations" and "developing count." Try to be more precise and use linking words to improve clarity.

Exemplo: After completing my master's degree, I plan to return to Japan and resume my career as a journalist. Additionally, I am interested in exploring job opportunities in the energy sector or with the United Nations because I want to support people in developing countries.

× I have joined my company 10 years ago and I wanna get a lot of information and knowledge about that.

✓ I joined my company 10 years ago and I want to get a lot of information and knowledge about that.

The sentence incorrectly uses the present perfect tense 'have joined' with a specific past time '10 years ago', which requires the simple past tense 'joined'. Also, 'wanna' is informal and should be 'want to' in formal speech.

× I find the location of workplaces quite essential, especially for journalists, because we have to make a conversations with important people, researchers, entrepreneurs, governors or politicians, and I think my workplace is one of the best of my.

✓ I find the location of workplaces quite essential, especially for journalists, because we have to have conversations with important people, researchers, entrepreneurs, governors or politicians, and I think my workplace is one of the best for me.

The phrase 'make a conversations' is incorrect; the correct collocation is 'have conversations'. Also, 'one of the best of my' is incomplete and should be 'one of the best for me' to express possession correctly.

× Yes, I think my workplace is conveniently located especially for journalists because we can easily go to everywhere in the Kanto area using a train as Tokyo Station is quite near my workplace.

✓ Yes, I think my workplace is conveniently located especially for journalists because we can easily go everywhere in the Kanto area by train as Tokyo Station is quite near my workplace.

The phrase 'go to everywhere' is incorrect; 'go everywhere' is correct. Also, 'using a train' should be 'by train' to express means of transport properly.

× In addition to that, after finishing work, we can easily go to bars and the restaurant.

✓ In addition to that, after finishing work, we can easily go to bars and restaurants.

The phrase 'go to bars and the restaurant' is inconsistent; 'bars' is plural but 'the restaurant' is singular and specific. It should be 'bars and restaurants' to match the plural form and general meaning.

× Just start to finishing our jobs, which help journalists get a lot of information and related knowledge about their jobs, such as politics or arts.

✓ Just starting and finishing our jobs helps journalists get a lot of information and related knowledge about their work, such as politics or arts.

The phrase 'Just start to finishing' is ungrammatical; it should be 'Just starting and finishing'. Also, the verb 'help' should be singular 'helps' to agree with the singular subject. 'Jobs' is better replaced with 'work' for clarity.

× Besides that, I want to search for other job opportunities such as energy or United Nations because I'm interested in supporting and aiding the people in developing count.

✓ Besides that, I want to look for other job opportunities such as in energy or the United Nations because I'm interested in supporting and aiding people in developing countries.

The phrase 'search for' is less natural than 'look for' in this context. 'Such as energy or United Nations' needs prepositions: 'in energy or the United Nations'. 'The people' is better as 'people' here. 'Developing count' is incomplete and should be 'developing countries'.