Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Perbaiki pengucapan nama perusahaan dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih ringkas dan alami. Hindari pengulangan dan kesalahan tata bahasa untuk membuat jawaban lebih efektif.

Exemplo: I'm currently working at Bank Danamon, one of the largest private banks in Indonesia. I enjoy working there because the environment is friendly and less political.

Sugestão: Kurangi penggunaan pengisi kata seperti 'uh' dan perbaiki tata bahasa. Gunakan kalimat yang jelas dan langsung untuk menjawab pertanyaan.

Exemplo: I work at Bank Danamon, and I enjoy my role because it challenges me to push my limits and sometimes even exceed them.

Sugestão: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kata penghubung yang tepat untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren dan alami.

Exemplo: Yes, it is a great place to work because the environment is calm and professional. Moreover, there is little office politics, which allows employees to grow and develop their potential.

Sugestão: Hindari pengisi kata yang berlebihan dan lengkapi kalimat yang belum selesai. Gunakan kalimat yang jelas dan lengkap untuk menjawab pertanyaan.

Exemplo: Yes, I like the location of my workplace because it is easily reachable and accessible by public transport.

Sugestão: Jawaban sudah baik, namun bisa ditingkatkan dengan menambahkan alasan yang lebih spesifik dan menggunakan kata penghubung untuk memperjelas hubungan antar ide.

Exemplo: Currently, I work as a product specialist in corporate banking. In the future, I would like to become a sustainable finance product specialist because I believe sustainable finance is the future of the banking and financial industry, and it can help address environmental challenges.

× Bangnamon is one of largest private bank in Indonesia

✓ Bangnamon is one of the largest private banks in Indonesia

The phrase 'one of largest private bank' is incorrect because 'one of' should be followed by a plural noun with the definite article 'the'. Therefore, it should be 'one of the largest private banks'. This corrects the singular/plural agreement and article usage.

× Bangnamon is one of largest private bank in Indonesia

✓ Bangnamon is one of the largest private banks in Indonesia

The definite article 'the' is missing before 'largest'. When using 'one of', it is necessary to use 'the' before the superlative adjective 'largest'.

× because it has friendly environment

✓ because it has a friendly environment

The noun 'environment' is countable in this context and requires the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× because it has friendly environment and also less political situation in the office

✓ because it has a friendly environment and also less political situations in the office

The phrase 'less political situation' is incorrect because 'situation' is countable and should be pluralized to 'situations' when using 'less' to compare quantity.

× because it has friendly environment and also less political situation in the office

✓ because it has a friendly environment and also less political situation in the office

Alternatively, 'situation' can be used in singular if referring to the general atmosphere, but then 'less' is better replaced with 'a less political situation' or 'less political atmosphere'. The original sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'friendly environment' and 'political situation'.

× the employees having the chance to grow to the maximum limit and also enhance their potential

✓ the employees have the chance to grow to the maximum limit and also enhance their potential

The verb 'having' is incorrect here; it should be 'have'. Also, 'the maximum limit' is acceptable but could be improved to 'their maximum potential' for naturalness.

× I love the location of my, uh, workplace because it quite, uh, reachable and also easy to access, uh, by the public transport

✓ I love the location of my workplace because it is quite reachable and also easy to access by public transport

The phrase 'easy to access by the public transport' is incorrect because 'public transport' is uncountable and does not need 'the'. Also, 'it quite reachable' is missing the verb 'is'.

× it quite, uh, reachable and also easy to access

✓ it is quite reachable and also easy to access

The verb 'is' is missing before 'quite reachable', which is necessary for correct present tense sentence structure.