Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy such as "at the moment" and "just stay at home" together. Also, try to use a smoother sentence structure and correct minor grammar issues, like "one and a half years" instead of "1 and half year."

Exemplo: I'm currently not working because I stay at home to take care of my child. Before this, I worked as a food service supervisor for about one and a half years.

Sugestão: Your answer provides relevant information but could be more natural and structured. Avoid repeating words like "actually" and improve sentence flow. Also, use correct prepositions and articles, for example, "20 kilometres away from my house in the countryside."

Exemplo: I worked at a Mr. Sub, which is a food chain located about 20 kilometres from my house in the countryside.

Sugestão: Your answer shows enthusiasm but contains hesitations and grammatical errors. Try to avoid filler words like "uh" and "you know." Use past tense correctly, e.g., "I never wanted to leave my job." Also, organize your answer with linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, it was a great place to work. I never wanted to leave, but I had to because of my child. The environment was peaceful and quiet since it was in the countryside, and working with the team was a wonderful experience.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains filler phrases. Try to be more specific and avoid vague expressions like "your behaviour was too good." Also, improve sentence structure and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

Exemplo: Yes, I liked the quiet, cozy, and comfortable atmosphere. I enjoyed working with the team and appreciated how supportive the management was. Although dealing with customers was challenging at times, I still enjoyed my time there.

Sugestão: Your answer has many hesitations and unclear phrases. Try to speak more confidently and clearly. Use correct grammar and avoid filler words. Also, organize your ideas logically with linking words.

Exemplo: My husband and I have decided to open a new restaurant in the future. Since I have experience in food service and he works as a manager, we believe our skills will help us succeed.

× Previously I worked as a food service supervisor for about 1 and half year.

✓ Previously I worked as a food service supervisor for about one and a half years.

The phrase '1 and half year' is incorrect because 'year' should be plural when referring to more than one year. Also, 'one and a half' is the correct expression for 1.5. Therefore, it should be 'one and a half years' to indicate the duration properly.

× I worked actually in a food chain organization that is actually a Mr. sub chain and it's just a 20 kilometer away from my house and it's to the countryside area.

✓ I actually worked in a food chain organization that is a Mr. Sub chain, and it's just 20 kilometres away from my house in the countryside area.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used before 'the countryside area'; the correct preposition is 'in' to indicate location. Also, 'a 20 kilometer' should be '20 kilometres' without 'a' because distance is uncountable here. Additionally, 'actually' is better placed before 'worked' for natural flow.

× Actually, I never want to, wanted to leave my job, but because of my, uh, kid, I, you know, have to left.

✓ Actually, I never wanted to leave my job, but because of my kid, I had to leave.

The phrase 'never want to, wanted to' is inconsistent; past tense 'wanted' is correct. Also, 'have to left' is incorrect; the past tense form 'had to leave' should be used to match the past context.

× it's to the countryside, never that much busy and working in a team was a, you know, wonderful experience.

✓ It's in the countryside, never that busy, and working in a team was a wonderful experience.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect when referring to location; 'in' is the correct preposition for 'the countryside'. Also, 'never that much busy' is awkward; 'never that busy' is more natural.

× I even, you know, I like to work with the team and manage. Your behaviour was too good, always helping us.

✓ I even, you know, like to work with the team and manage. Their behaviour was very good, always helping us.

The pronoun 'Your' is incorrectly used when referring to the team; 'Their' is appropriate for third person plural. Also, 'too good' is better expressed as 'very good' to avoid unintended negative connotation.

× although it was, you know, very challenging for us to deal with the customer, but still I liked a lot over there.

✓ Although it was very challenging for us to deal with customers, I still liked it a lot over there.

The phrase 'deal with the customer' should be plural 'customers' to indicate general experience. Also, 'but still' is redundant after 'although'; 'although' alone suffices. The sentence structure is improved by removing 'but' and repositioning 'still'.

× Aval, me and my husband decided to, to decide, are you still deciding to open a new restaurant as I, I have a, a food service experience and he is, uh, you know, working as a manager.

✓ At present, my husband and I have decided to open a new restaurant since I have food service experience and he is working as a manager.

The original sentence is confusing and contains repetition ('decided to, to decide'). 'Aval' is unclear and replaced with 'At present' for clarity. The question 'are you still deciding' is misplaced and removed to maintain sentence coherence. Also, 'me and my husband' should be 'my husband and I' for correct pronoun order and case.

× So definitely both jobs will, you know, help us in the future. So yeah, we'll definitely think about opening a restaurant.

✓ So definitely both jobs will help us in the future. So yeah, we'll definitely open a restaurant.

The phrase 'we'll definitely think about opening a restaurant' suggests uncertainty, but the context implies a firm plan. Changing to 'we'll definitely open a restaurant' reflects a clearer future intention. Also, removing filler phrases like 'you know' improves clarity.