Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is informative but slightly long and contains minor grammatical errors such as 'joined here in on'. Try to make your response more concise and correct small mistakes to sound more natural. Also, avoid unnecessary details like exact dates unless relevant.

Exemplo: I work as an Assistant Secretary at the Ministry of Foreign Affairs in Bangladesh. I secured this position after passing a competitive civil service exam.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and provides specific details, but there are minor grammatical errors such as 'one of the busiest place' which should be 'places'. Use linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: I work at the Ministry of Foreign Affairs in Bangladesh. My office is located in Shegunbagicha near the High Court, which is one of the busiest areas in Dhaka because many government offices are nearby.

Sugestão: Your answer is positive but could be more natural and concise. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'specifically in which room I serve'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: Yes, it is a very comfortable place to work. Moreover, the Ministry of Foreign Affairs is one of the most prestigious government offices in Bangladesh, and my office is well-equipped and pleasant.

Sugestão: Your answer repeats ideas and uses unnatural phrases like 'I would love the place' and 'I don't opt to change my job'. Try to express your feelings more naturally and avoid redundancy.

Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoy working there. The environment is lively and comfortable, and I am happy to continue my job without any plans to change it.

Sugestão: Your answer has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing such as 'which is hold very prestigious in our mainstream'. Try to express your ambitions clearly and use correct grammar and linking words.

Exemplo: In the future, I plan to continue my current job and eventually become an ambassador of Bangladesh to a developed and prestigious country.

× I joined here in on the 15th of January 2025 after competing in a very competitive exam of Bangladesh Civil Service.

✓ I joined here on the 15th of January 2025 after competing in a very competitive exam of Bangladesh Civil Service.

The phrase 'in on the 15th' is incorrect because 'in' is unnecessary when specifying a precise date. The correct preposition to use with a specific date is 'on'. Removing 'in' corrects the past tense expression of the joining date.

× It is one of the busiest place in the Dhaka city because lots of government offices are around here.

✓ It is one of the busiest places in Dhaka city because lots of government offices are around here.

The word 'place' should be plural 'places' because the phrase 'one of the busiest' refers to one item among many. Also, 'the Dhaka city' is incorrect; 'Dhaka city' without 'the' is appropriate here.

× Furthermore, Ministry of Foreign Affairs is one of the most posh government offices in Bangladesh and specifically in which room I serve is very comfortable.

✓ Furthermore, the Ministry of Foreign Affairs is one of the most posh government offices in Bangladesh, and specifically the room in which I serve is very comfortable.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'Ministry of Foreign Affairs' as it is a specific institution. Also, the sentence structure is improved by repositioning 'the room' and adding a comma before 'and' to separate clauses properly.

× Yes, I would love the place where I work.

✓ Yes, I love the place where I work.

The modal verb 'would' is incorrectly used here. 'Would love' implies a hypothetical or future desire, but the context indicates a present feeling. Using 'love' expresses a current and definite liking.

× As I have already told, the place is so gorgeous and so vivid and lively and comfortable to work.

✓ As I have already told you, the place is so gorgeous, vivid, lively, and comfortable to work in.

The phrase 'As I have already told' is incomplete; it should be 'told you' to specify the listener. Also, the multiple 'and's are better replaced with commas for listing adjectives. Adding 'in' at the end clarifies the phrase 'comfortable to work in'.

× I would love to serve and I don't opt to change my job.

✓ I would love to serve, and I don't intend to change my job.

The conjunction 'and' should be preceded by a comma to separate independent clauses. The phrase 'don't opt to change' is awkward; 'don't intend to change' is more natural and correct in this context.

× My future work plan is to continue my current job and over time I want to want to become an ambassador of Bangladesh to some developed country which is hold very prestigious in our mainstream.

✓ My future work plan is to continue my current job, and over time I want to become an ambassador of Bangladesh to some developed country which is held in very high prestige in our mainstream.

The phrase 'want to want to' is a repetition error and should be corrected to a single 'want to'. The verb 'hold' should be in past participle 'held' to form the passive voice. Also, 'very prestigious' is an adjective, but the phrase requires a noun form; 'held in very high prestige' is more appropriate. Adding a comma before 'and' improves sentence structure.