Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then provide one or two specific details. Avoid redundancy and fix verb forms and word order (e.g., "I'm studying economics and aiming to complete my bachelor's. After that, I plan to go abroad for a master's degree and I have a country in mind"). Use linking words like "then" or "after that."

Exemplo: I’m currently a student studying economics and working towards my bachelor’s degree. After I finish, I plan to go abroad for a master’s degree; I’m particularly interested in studying in the UK because of its strong economics programs.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly: say you don't work, then give one specific related detail. Correct grammar and phrasing (e.g., "As I mentioned, I don’t work at the moment because I’m a student. However, I’m looking for a part-time position at a reputable bank to gain experience"). Use a linking word like "however" to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I don’t work at the moment because I’m a full-time student. However, I’m looking for a part-time role at a reputable bank to gain practical experience in finance.

Sugestão: Make the response coherent: state your opinion then support it with a specific reason and correct word choice. Replace unclear phrases ("repetitive bank", "diverse for working") with precise language. Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

Exemplo: Yes, I think it would be a good place to work because my friends who worked there as cashiers told me it has a friendly atmosphere and varied tasks that help you learn different banking skills.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and one concrete reason. Fix tense and phrasing (e.g., "I would like to work there because..."). Avoid repeating phrases and focus on one idea per answer. Use linking words like "because" or "so."

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to work there because it offers good training and career progression. Therefore, I hope to become a banker at a well-known bank in my city.

Sugestão: Start with a clear statement of your plan, then give a specific reason and a brief detail about how you will achieve it. Correct word forms and phrasing (e.g., "I want to become an economist because..."). Keep it to two or three sentences and use linking words like "because" and "in order to."

Exemplo: My main plan is to become an economist because I enjoy analyzing economic problems and helping shape policy. To achieve that, I will finish my bachelor’s degree in economics and then pursue a master’s in economic policy to gain the necessary skills.

× I'm a student now, I am studying in economics and my goal is pursuing my bachelor's degree in economics.

✓ I'm a student now; I am studying economics, and my goal is to pursue my bachelor's degree in economics.

The original mixes verb forms: 'my goal is pursuing' is unnatural. Use the infinitive 'to pursue' after 'goal is' (Present tense and verb form issue). Also 'studying in economics' should be 'studying economics'. Use a semicolon or conjunction to separate clauses for clarity.

× Moreover, I plan to go for abroad my master degree and I pick a country.

✓ Moreover, I plan to go abroad to study for my master's degree, and I have chosen a country.

Errors include word order ('go for abroad' is incorrect), article and noun form ('master degree' -> 'master's degree'), and tense/aspect ('I pick a country' should be past or present perfect to show decision: 'have chosen'). This corrects future intention and proper phrasing.

× Well I sent earlier, I am a student so I have no work experience at the moment.

✓ As I said earlier, I am a student, so I have no work experience at the moment.

'Well I sent earlier' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'As I said earlier'. This fixes sentence structure and makes the temporal reference clear.

× However I look for the working on a suitable place as well as a well known bank.

✓ However, I am looking for work in a suitable place, such as a well-known bank.

Use progressive form 'am looking' for current activity; 'the working on a suitable place' is incorrect—use 'work' or 'a job'. 'well known' needs a hyphen as a compound adjective. 'as well as' replaced with 'such as' for clarity.

× Of course, I heard about all work experience from my friends, which is work as a cashier in a repetitive bank.

✓ Of course, I heard about work experiences from my friends, who worked as cashiers in a local bank.

'which is work as a cashier in a repetitive bank' is ungrammatical. Use 'who' for people and pluralize 'cashiers' and change 'repetitive bank' to a plausible adjective like 'local bank'. 'all work experience' -> 'work experiences' or 'their work experience'.

× So it is a diverse for working and friendly environment.

✓ So it offers a diverse and friendly working environment.

Word order and word forms wrong: 'a diverse for working' incorrect. Use 'diverse and friendly working environment' and verb 'offers' to link the subject.

× Of course I like the place when I work.

✓ Of course I will like the place where I work.

Context asks about future preference. Original mixes present simple with 'when I work'; use future 'will like' and 'where' for location. If student already works, present 'I like the place where I work' would be appropriate; here future intention fits better.

× Apart from this, I look for a suitable job to work.

✓ Apart from this, I am looking for a suitable job to work in.

Use progressive 'am looking' for current action and add preposition 'in' to complete 'job to work in' or rephrase as 'a suitable job.'

× Now I wish to become a banker in well known Bank of my city.

✓ Now I wish to become a banker in a well-known bank in my city.

Capitalization and article usage: 'well known Bank of my city' is incorrect. Use lowercase 'bank', add article 'a', hyphenate 'well-known', and use 'in my city' for natural English.

× There are several future plans, but I talk about a specific one.

✓ I have several future plans, but I'll talk about one specific plan.

'There are several future plans' is grammatical but less natural; 'I talk about a specific one' should be future or present continuous: 'I'll talk' or 'I'm going to talk'. This revision fits the conversational context.

× I like to become an economist in future and pursue my goal in this sector.

✓ I would like to become an economist in the future and pursue my career in this sector.

Use 'would like' for polite future intention and add 'the' before 'future'. 'Pursue my goal' is vague; 'pursue my career' is clearer. Tense and modality adjusted.

× Moreover, it is a reputative job and gave me satisfaction when I work as.

✓ Moreover, it is a reputable job and it would give me satisfaction when I work as one.

'Reputative' is incorrect; use 'reputable'. Verb tense 'gave me' should be conditional 'would give me' when speaking of future. Complete the sentence with 'as one' or 'as an economist' to clarify the role.