Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct small grammar and pronunciation issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (don’t repeat 'I love working at this company' twice), remove filler words like 'uh', and use a clearer adjective phrase (e.g., 'very collaborative' instead of 'a lot collaborative'). Limit to 2–4 sentences and add one specific supporting detail (what skills improved).

Exemplo: I work as a software engineer at a corporate semiconductor company and I’ve been there for five years. The workplace is very collaborative, which has helped me improve my coding and teamwork skills. I also get opportunities to communicate with cross‑functional teams regularly.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, correct small grammar errors (e.g., 'write scripts' not 'write a scripts'), avoid fillers, and combine sentences using linking words like 'and' or 'which' for coherence. Add one specific example of a task or a cross‑functional team you help to make the answer more concrete.

Exemplo: I work at a semiconductor company in South San Jose where I write and test code and develop scripts to support cross‑functional teams. For example, I created an automation script that reduced testing time for the QA team by 30%, which improved overall workflow.

Sugestão: Open with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition ('helped me understand the work better and better'), and fix small grammar (use 'work–life balance' and 'in turn'). Provide one specific reason or example of policies or practices that create work–life balance (flexible hours, remote days). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, it is an excellent place to work because my colleagues are supportive and the company offers flexible hours. For instance, I can work remotely two days a week, which lets me spend more time with my family and come back more productive.

Sugestão: Start with a concise topic sentence, avoid short fragmented sentences and trailing words ('during.'). Combine related ideas with linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'and'), correct grammar ('helps us discuss work more openly'), and give one specific detail about the break room or the commute to make it vivid.

Exemplo: Yes, I really like my workplace because it’s on the outskirts of the city and away from traffic noise, so the commute is pleasant. I usually carpool with colleagues, which gives us time to discuss projects, and we have a comfortable break room with sofas and coffee where we relax.

Sugestão: Give a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence and a concise plan. Fix errors ('promoting to a managerial role' → 'being promoted to a managerial role'; remove 'A to'). Use linking words to explain how you will achieve this (e.g., 'by gaining experience and taking leadership training') and add one specific step or timeline to make the goal realistic.

Exemplo: I aim to be promoted to a managerial role within the next two to three years by taking on more technical leadership tasks and completing a management training program. In that role, I want to lead the team that develops automation tools to improve our testing processes.

× I've been working at this company for five years now.

✓ I have worked at this company for five years now.

The original uses present perfect continuous which is acceptable, but in formal answers 'have worked' (present perfect) better emphasizes duration as a state; either form can be correct. Use present perfect to clearly state a completed duration without implying continuous action.

× the environment here is a lot collaborative

✓ the environment here is very collaborative

'a lot' is not used before adjectives like 'collaborative'. Use 'very' or 'highly' to modify adjectives. Suggestion: use 'very collaborative' or 'highly collaborative'.

× I work at a semiconductor company in South San Jose where I implement code, test it, and also write a scripts to help other cross functional teams complete their work.

✓ I work at a semiconductor company in South San Jose where I implement code, test it, and also write scripts to help other cross-functional teams complete their work.

'a scripts' is incorrect because 'scripts' is plural and should not take 'a'. Also 'cross functional' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective before a noun: 'cross-functional'. Remove the article and fix hyphenation.

× and it has given me, uh, great opportunities to, uh, communicate and improve.

✓ and it has given me great opportunities to communicate and improve.

The fillers 'uh' should be omitted in written answers. No pronoun error per se, but removing fillers improves clarity. Keep verbs parallel: 'to communicate and to improve' or 'to communicate and improve'.

× This work also provides a lot of work life balance that helps me spend time with my family which in turns improves the productivity.

✓ This work also provides a lot of work-life balance that helps me spend time with my family, which in turn improves productivity.

Use 'work-life' with a hyphen when used as a compound noun modifier. 'in turns' is incorrect; use 'in turn' (singular). Also 'the productivity' is unnecessary—use 'productivity'. Added a comma before the nonrestrictive clause.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The examiner's question used 'Would you like...' which asks about preference in hypothetical or polite terms; the student's response should match by answering 'Do you like...' as a statement. However the student's original reply started 'Yes, I quite like...' — no correction required. Provided corrected question form for clarity.

× I also carpool with some of my colleagues that helps us discuss the work in a more pleasant and unrestricted manner.

✓ I also carpool with some of my colleagues, which helps us discuss work in a more pleasant and open manner.

Use 'which' to refer to the entire preceding clause (carpooling), not 'that'. 'Unrestricted' is odd here; 'open' is more natural. Added a comma before the nonrestrictive clause and removed 'the' before 'work' for natural phrasing.

× My company also has a great break room that helps us relax during.

✓ My company also has a great break room that helps us relax during breaks.

The sentence ends with the preposition 'during' without an object. Add 'breaks' to complete the phrase: 'relax during breaks.'

× I see myself progressing in my current role and promoting to A to a managerial role in my current company.

✓ I see myself progressing in my current role and being promoted to a managerial role in my current company.

'Promoting to' is incorrect because promotion is typically received, not performed by the employee. Use passive 'being promoted' or active 'getting promoted'. Remove the stray 'A to a'.

× I look forward to managing this amazing group of people that work on helping and improving technology by everyday.

✓ I look forward to managing this amazing group of people who work on helping and improving technology every day.

Use 'who' for people rather than 'that'. 'everyday' is an adjective meaning 'ordinary'; use the adverbial phrase 'every day'. Removed 'by' which is incorrect here.