Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use correct tense and natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “I’m not working at the moment.”), then add one brief supporting detail about your recent job using past tense and a time reference. Avoid filler words like “like” and unnecessary repetition.

Exemplo: I’m not working at the moment. I left a job at a five‑star hotel two months ago after finishing my contract, and I’m currently preparing for the IELTS test.

Sugestão: Give a clear, well-structured answer: start with the job and location, then explain the timeline concisely. Reduce hesitation and filler words, correct grammar (article use and number agreement), and combine short facts into one or two sentences. Use linking words like “first” or “then” to show sequence.

Exemplo: I worked as a housekeeping supervisor at a five‑star luxury hotel in Milan. First I completed a three‑month internship, and then I was hired on a six‑month contract.

Sugestão: Balance positive and negative points in a logical order and use correct sentence structure. Start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons—one positive and one negative—using linking words such as “however” or “but.” Avoid vague phrases like “a little bit.”

Exemplo: It was a great place overall; the facilities were excellent. However, the job was very hectic and sometimes the atmosphere felt toxic, because staff had to manage constant guest requests under tight deadlines.

Sugestão: Answer the exact question asked and keep it focused. The examiner asked about liking the workplace, but you talked about your house. Briefly clarify that you are not working now, then answer the intended question about the workplace or correct the misunderstanding. Use one or two supporting details and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: I’m not working at the moment, so I don’t currently spend time at the hotel. When I did work there I liked the facilities and the team, although the shifts were tiring. At home I’m comfortable — I live in a two‑storey house with a large living room where I study for the IELTS.

Sugestão: Use a clear topic sentence and give specific, realistic steps you will take. Correct grammar (subject–verb agreement) and avoid vague phrasing like “investment chains.” Mention how your experience links to your goal and include one or two concrete actions (study, courses, internships).

Exemplo: My future plan is to become a financial analyst, ideally at firms such as Blackstone or IHC Group. To achieve this I’m studying finance, planning to take relevant courses and seek internships that focus on real estate and hotel development so I can combine my hospitality experience with financial skills.

× Currently I am unemployed because I finished my work in a five star hotel like 2 months ago.

✓ Currently I am unemployed because I finished my work at a five-star hotel about two months ago.

The sentence mixes informal 'like' as a time marker and has minor preposition and hyphenation problems. Use 'about' instead of 'like' for an approximate time, 'at' for locations of employment, and hyphenate 'five-star'. This keeps past tense 'finished' correct and clarifies meaning.

× I worked in a five star luxury hotel in Milan as an housekeeping supervisor.

✓ I worked in a five-star luxury hotel in Milan as a housekeeping supervisor.

Use hyphenated 'five-star' and correct article + noun: 'a housekeeping supervisor' should be 'a housekeeping supervisor' (remove extra 'an'). The past tense 'worked' is appropriate.

× Umm, it was uh, an internship of uh, three months.

✓ Umm, it was an internship of three months.

The original sentence had filler words; grammatically it should be 'an internship of three months' or more naturally 'a three-month internship' (hyphenated). Use 'a three-month internship' for better style.

× But uh, after that I was employed.

✓ But after that I was employed.

Remove filler words for clarity. The past tense 'was employed' is correct.

× I was, uh, employed for UH-6 month contract.

✓ I was employed on a six-month contract.

Use 'on a six-month contract' (hyphenate 'six-month') and avoid 'for ... contract'. 'On a contract' or 'for a six-month contract' is acceptable, but 'on a six-month contract' is idiomatic.

× Well, the place is absolutely wonderful but working a hotel requires a lot of soft skills like problem solving, time management and adaptability.

✓ Well, the place is absolutely wonderful, but working in a hotel requires a lot of soft skills like problem-solving, time management, and adaptability.

Use 'working in a hotel' rather than 'working a hotel'. Hyphenate 'problem-solving' and include commas in a list. This corrects preposition and punctuation errors.

× Also was a little bit a toxic environment and very hectic.

✓ Also, it was a bit of a toxic environment and very hectic.

Missing subject 'it' must precede the verb. Use 'a bit of a toxic environment' (not 'a little bit a') and keep past tense 'was' consistent.

× Currently I'm not working, I am at home.

✓ Currently I'm not working; I am at home.

Grammatically add proper punctuation between independent clauses (semicolon or period). Tense is present continuous 'I'm not working' which is appropriate.

× So yes, I like my house because currently I'm studying for the IELTS test.

✓ So yes, I like my house because I'm currently studying for the IELTS test.

Move 'currently' to a more natural position 'I'm currently studying'. Present continuous is appropriate for ongoing action.

× That's all.

✓ That's all.

Sentence is fine; no grammatical correction needed.

× Yeah, I like my house. Big house, 2 floors with a big and beautiful living room.

✓ Yeah, I like my house. It's a big house with two floors and a large, beautiful living room.

Provide a complete sentence by adding subject and verb 'It's'. Write numbers in words ('two') in formal speech and use correct adjective order 'large, beautiful' and include commas.

× My plans for the future is becoming an analyst, a financial analyst for investment chains like Blackstone or IHC Group, and those business firms are very important for hotel development and real estate.

✓ My plans for the future are to become an analyst, a financial analyst for investment chains like Blackstone or IHC Group; these business firms are very important for hotel development and real estate.

Subject 'plans' is plural, so use 'are' not 'is'. Use the infinitive 'to become' after 'plans'. Replace 'those' with 'these' or restructure; add a semicolon or period to separate clauses for clarity.