Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence (I have just graduated and am currently at home preparing for work), then add one specific detail about your plans. Avoid repetition and filler words like "uh" and "right now."

Exemplo: I have just graduated and am currently staying at home while I prepare for future work. For example, I'm taking online courses in business skills to get ready for a job or to start my own project.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence (I work from home on a small clothing project) and give one specific detail about what you do and who you sell to. Use correct vocabulary (sell, independent) and avoid unclear phrases.

Exemplo: I work from home on a small clothing business. I design and sew garments and usually sell them to friends and family through social media.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer and support it with specific reasons, using linking words (because, so). Avoid vague endings. Correct grammar ("it helps me concentrate"), and limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, it's a great place for me to work because I'm an introvert and can concentrate better at home. Also, working from home gives me flexibility to schedule sewing and design time when I'm most productive.

Sugestão: Keep the answer simple and natural. Say clearly whether you like the workplace and explain why with one or two specific reasons. Avoid confusing metaphors and incorrect grammar. Use future intention correctly (I hope to start my business).

Exemplo: Yes, I really like working at home because I am my own boss and I enjoy the creative freedom. I am confident that with hard work I will start my own business successfully in the future.

Sugestão: Give a direct statement about your plans and one specific reason or detail. Use correct grammar for intentions (I would like to join an international company that can help me grow my business internationally). Avoid repetition and filler words.

Exemplo: In the future, I would like to work for an international company that can teach me business skills and provide global experience so I can expand my clothing brand worldwide.

× Uh, I recently complete my graduation so right now I'm staying at home and just preparing for further work or story.

✓ Uh, I recently completed my graduation, so right now I'm staying at home and just preparing for further work or study.

The verb 'complete' should be in the past tense 'completed' because the action happened before now ('recently'). Also 'story' is likely a wrong word choice; 'study' fits context. Use a comma before 'so' to link clauses properly.

× I'm confused right now.

✓ I'm a bit confused right now.

Sentence is grammatical but sounds unnatural; adding 'a bit' clarifies degree. No tense change needed.

× So I right now I'm just staying at home.

✓ So right now I'm just staying at home.

Word order is awkward: place 'right now' before the verb phrase. This improves natural English word order.

× I'm more self independence, that's why I work at my home for my little project, which is making clothes and seal them with our friends and family.

✓ I am more independent, so I work at home on a small project making clothes and selling them to friends and family.

Use adjective 'independent' instead of noun phrase 'self independence.' 'At my home' -> 'at home.' 'Little project' -> 'small project.' 'Seal' is wrong verb; 'selling' is correct. Preposition 'to' fits 'selling to friends and family.' Adjusted verb forms and word choices for natural English.

× So yeah, it's a house where is.

✓ So yeah, it's a house where I work.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and missing subject. Clarified by specifying purpose 'where I work.'

× For me is it's a very good place to work, uh, because I'm an introvert and I like to do work at home and that's why it's good for me to do in my own self and concentrate.

✓ For me it's a very good place to work because I'm an introvert and I like to work at home; that helps me concentrate.

Remove extra 'is' and redundant phrases. Use 'work at home' and simpler structure 'that helps me concentrate.' Avoid 'do in my own self.'

× And also it's make me feel so.

✓ It also makes me feel comfortable.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it makes' not 'it's make.' 'Feel so' is incomplete and unclear; 'feel comfortable' conveys meaning.

× And definitely I love the place and there is a no wars employees a smile myself and I'm a boss.

✓ Definitely I love the place; there are no co-workers, I smile by myself, and I'm my own boss.

Use 'there are' for plural 'co-workers' rather than 'there is.' 'No wars employees' is unclear and replaced with 'no co-workers.' Clarified 'I'm my own boss.' 'Smile myself' is odd; 'I smile by myself' is literal but still unnatural — consider 'I enjoy working alone.'

× I'm a star everything.

✓ I feel like a star in every way.

Original is fragmented; rephrased to a natural expression meaning the speaker feels important or confident.

× So I just love myself. I'll to do that things and I'm very confident that one day I will be start.

✓ So I just love myself. I want to do those things and I'm very confident that one day I will start my business.

'I'll to do' is incorrect; use 'I want to do' or 'I will do.' 'Those' replaces 'that' to match plural 'things.' 'I will be start' is incorrect structure; use 'I will start' or 'I will be starting.' Added 'my business' to clarify object.

× Uh, I like to go and join for international company, uh, who is will help to grow my own business and it will be no world widely.

✓ I would like to go and join an international company that will help grow my own business and make it worldwide.

Use conditional 'would like' for polite future intention. 'Join for' is incorrect; use 'join an international company.' 'Who is will help' incorrect auxiliary — use 'that will help.' 'Help grow' does not require 'to.' 'No world widely' is incorrect; 'make it worldwide' expresses intended meaning.