Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct articles and word order, give a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail. Mention your field of study and the university location more naturally. Avoid unnecessary words and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I am a student at Shahid Beige University, where I study laboratory science. The campus is located on Jack Hill, and I enjoy the peaceful surroundings that help me focus on my studies.

Sugestão: Use correct nouns and possessives, and structure the response: state where you work, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Replace vague phrases with concrete details (e.g., ‘pharmacy’, ‘my manager is supportive’).

Exemplo: I work at a local pharmacy. I enjoy my job because my manager is supportive and my colleagues are friendly, so we communicate well during busy shifts.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure: begin with a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples of what makes it good (polite colleagues, supportive environment). Use correct adjective forms (e.g., ‘behave very well’).

Exemplo: Yes, it is a very good place to work because my coworkers are polite and helpful. For example, they always assist me when the pharmacy gets busy, which makes the job less stressful.

Sugestão: Be concise and avoid fillers (‘uh’, repeated words). Give one clear reason and a future-related comment if needed. Correct vocabulary and unclear phrases (e.g., ‘keep my car and my work’ -> maybe ‘keep my job and stay there’).

Exemplo: Yes, I like working there because my colleagues are also my friends and they treat me kindly. I hope to keep this job for a long time because it feels welcoming and stable.

Sugestão: Provide a clear, grammatically correct statement of your career goal and one supporting detail about how you will achieve it. Use correct tense and plural/singular forms and avoid unnecessary hesitation. Be specific about steps or timeline if possible.

Exemplo: My future plan is to open my own laboratory because I am studying laboratory science at university. I am working hard on internships and building skills now, and I hope to establish my lab within a few years after graduation.

× I am student, I study in Shahid Beige university.

✓ I am a student. I study at Shahid Beige University.

Missing article 'a' before 'student' and wrong preposition 'in' for institutions; 'university' is a proper noun so capitalize. Use 'at' for attending an institution. Also split into two sentences for clarity.

× It builds on the walling Jack hill.

✓ It is built on Jack Hill's walling.

Original sentence has unclear structure. Likely meaning is the university is built on Jack Hill's walling; use passive 'is built' for structure description and possessive 'Jack Hill's'. If the intended meaning differs, rephrase accordingly.

× I work in drugstore.

✓ I work in a drugstore.

Countable noun 'drugstore' requires an article ('a'). Use 'in a drugstore' to indicate workplace.

× I love there because I love my work manager.

✓ I like it there because I like my manager at work.

Use 'like' rather than 'love' for general workplace preference; 'there' should be replaced with 'it there' or 'it' and position adjusted. 'Work manager' is unnatural; 'manager at work' or simply 'my manager' is correct.

× I have a very friendly conversation with my work meets.

✓ I have very friendly conversations with my workmates.

Plural noun 'workmates' is the correct form. 'Conversation' should be plural 'conversations' for habitual action. 'Work meets' is incorrect; use 'workmates'.

× Yes, it is. As I said, it is very friendly.

✓ Yes, it is. As I said, it is very friendly there.

Add 'there' to clarify the place being described. Original is grammatical but adding 'there' improves clarity.

× I love there because because of my workmates.

✓ I like it there because of my workmates.

Use 'like it there' rather than 'love there'. Remove duplicate 'because'. 'Because of' correctly introduces the reason.

× They are polite and they behave very good with me.

✓ They are polite and they behave very well with me.

Use adverb 'well' to modify the verb 'behave' rather than adjective 'good'.

× Yes, of course I like the place uh, because as I said, uh, my workmates are my friend too.

✓ Yes, of course I like the place because, as I said, my workmates are my friends too.

'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to agree with plural 'workmates'. Also remove filler 'uh' and add commas for clarity.

× They behave very nice with me.

✓ They behave very nicely toward me.

Use adverb 'nicely' to modify 'behave'. 'With me' is acceptable but 'toward me' is more natural in this context.

× I I love them really and I want to keep my car and my work because of my work.

✓ I really love them, and I want to keep my job because of my colleagues.

Remove duplicated 'I'. 'Keep my car and my work' is unclear; likely intended 'keep my job'. Replace 'my work' with 'my job' and 'my work' at end with 'colleagues' for clarity.

× What are your future work plans?

✓ What are your future work plans?

This is already correct; no grammatical change needed. It uses present continuous appropriately to ask about future plans.

× I dream to have a laboratory by myself because I study in laboratory science in university.

✓ I dream of having my own laboratory because I study laboratory science at university.

Use 'dream of doing' or 'dream about' plus gerund: 'dream of having'. 'By myself' is better expressed as 'my own'. Use 'at university' as the common preposition. 'Laboratory science' is fine.

× Uh, I really try and I want to be a first women have own laboratory in my.

✓ I am really trying, and I want to be the first woman to have my own laboratory in my country.

Use progressive 'am trying' to indicate ongoing effort. 'First woman to have' requires infinitive 'to have'. 'Women' should be singular 'woman'. Add 'my country' to complete the thought; adjust word order and possessive 'my own laboratory'.