Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy (“work” repeated, “filling” twice), correct collocations (say “Woolworths” and “night filler”), and simplify tense usage. Keep within 3–4 sentences and include one specific detail about responsibilities.

Exemplo: I work at Woolworths as a night-filler team member. I mainly restock frozen items such as vegetables and ice cream and tidy the freezer sections. Occasionally I assist customers at the service desk when needed.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence naming the location, then add two specific, well-linked details. Correct grammar ("one of the stores", "closer" -> "close"), use linking words ("because", "so") and avoid unnecessary phrases. Keep it natural and under 4 sentences.

Exemplo: I work at the Woolworths store in Bella Vista, which is close to the metro station, so my commute is convenient. The store is fairly large — it has 14 aisles and a bakery section, which makes shopping easy for customers.

Sugestão: Give a direct opinion sentence followed by one or two specific reasons. Improve grammar and clarity ("lots of shops nearby", "I can buy groceries after my shifts"), use linking words like "because" or "and" to connect reasons, and avoid long run-on sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, it's a good place to work because the store is large and there are many shops nearby where I can buy lunch. I also often pick up groceries after my shift, which saves me time.

Sugestão: Answer directly then support with specific, concise details. Correct grammar and word choice ("I love working here", "managers are fair with shifts", avoid vague phrases like "taking the OPS"). Use linking words ("because", "also") and limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I love working here because my colleagues are supportive and we help each other with tasks. The managers are fair when assigning shifts, and the store's size means resources are well organised.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your main plan, then give one or two specific details about steps you are taking. Improve grammar ("My plan is", "I am waiting for my skills assessment result from..."), avoid vague or incorrect names, and use linking words ("because", "so") to show reason and action.

Exemplo: My main plan is to become a pharmacy technician in Australia. I have completed my pharmacy qualification and am waiting for a positive skills assessment; meanwhile I am gaining relevant experience at Woolworths to prepare for that role.

× I work at the Woolworth, a well reputed supermarket in Australia.

✓ I work at Woolworths, a well-reputed supermarket in Australia.

Use the correct company name form 'Woolworths' (no definite article) and hyphenate 'well-reputed' as a compound adjective before the noun. Also use the plural form used by the chain. Suggestion: Use official business names and hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns.

× I work there as a night filler team member to restock the filling of the frozen items like the frozen vegetables and the ice cream, and sometimes I used to help with a customer representative over there.

✓ I work there as a night filler team member, restocking frozen items like vegetables and ice cream, and sometimes I help customers at the service desk.

Use present continuous/gerund 'restocking' to show the routine task and simple present 'help' for habitual actions. 'Used to' implies past habit and is incorrect for current routines. 'Customer representative' is awkward; 'service desk' or 'help customers' is clearer. Remove redundant 'frozen' before specific items.

× I work in one of the store of the Woolworths which is in Bella Vista.

✓ I work in one of the Woolworths stores in Bella Vista.

Use plural 'stores' after 'one of the' and place 'in Bella Vista' after the noun. Correct preposition and word order improve clarity.

× It is very closer to the metro station which is which helps me in very convenient way to reach out there.

✓ It is very close to the metro station, which makes it very convenient for me to get there.

Use 'close' (adjective) not 'closer' (comparative). Place adverb 'very' before 'convenient' and use 'makes it convenient' to describe the effect. 'Reach out there' is unnatural; use 'get there' or 'reach there'.

× Also it has the 14 aisles and the bakery section.

✓ Also it has 14 aisles and a bakery section.

Do not use the definite article 'the' before a number in this context; use 'a bakery section' rather than 'the bakery section' unless specifying a particular one. Ensure noun phrases are natural.

× Yeah, it's a good place to work as it's a very big complex and outside the Woolworths there is lots of shops somewhere I can take my meals in my lunch time along the store also have the groceries which I generally purchase after finishing my shifts, which saves my times.

✓ Yes, it's a good place to work because it's a very large complex, and outside Woolworths there are lots of shops where I can buy meals at lunchtime. The store also has groceries that I usually purchase after finishing my shifts, which saves me time.

Replace 'yeah' with 'yes' for formality, use 'because' to connect reasons, 'large' is more natural than 'big' for a complex. Use plural agreement 'there are lots of shops'. 'Somewhere I can take my meals in my lunch time' clarified to 'where I can buy meals at lunchtime'. 'Along the store' is incorrect. Use 'has groceries' and 'usually' rather than 'generally'. 'Saves my times' corrected to 'saves me time' (pronoun and uncountable 'time').

× Yes definitely. I'm loving to work in this place because the staff and the team members are quite supportive and helpful with each other in every task.

✓ Yes, definitely. I love working here because the staff and team members are very supportive and helpful to each other in every task.

Avoid using 'I'm loving' (present continuous) for a state; use 'I love' or 'I enjoy working'. Use 'helpful to each other' or 'help each other' for reciprocity. 'In this place' is better as 'here'.

× Even the manager are suitable for giving the shifts and taking the OPS whenever you required.

✓ Even the manager is good at assigning shifts and handling the OPS whenever you need it.

Use singular verb 'is' to agree with singular 'manager'. 'Suitable for giving the shifts' is unnatural; use 'good at assigning shifts'. 'Whenever you required' is past tense; use 'whenever you need it'. Clarify 'OPS' with appropriate verb 'handling'.

× And this store is very big so everything I find is very good.

✓ And this store is very big, so I find everything to be very good.

Add comma for readability and rephrase 'everything I find is very good' to the more natural 'I find everything to be very good'. Maintain present simple for habitual opinion.

× My work plans for the future is to become a pharmacy technician here in Australia as I have completed my pharmacy and waiting for my skill assessment to grant positive from Dasika.

✓ My work plan for the future is to become a pharmacy technician here in Australia, as I have completed my pharmacy studies and am waiting for a positive result from my skills assessment by Dasika.

Use singular 'plan' to agree with 'is', or change verb accordingly. 'Completed my pharmacy' is incomplete; use 'pharmacy studies'. Use present continuous 'am waiting' and rephrase 'to grant positive from Dasika' to 'a positive result from my skills assessment by Dasika' for clarity.

× Alongside, I will definitely contribute my work experience towards the pharmacy technician as becoming a pharmacist was my dream.

✓ Additionally, I will definitely apply my work experience toward becoming a pharmacy technician, as becoming a pharmacist has always been my dream.

'Alongside' is awkward here; use 'Additionally' or 'Furthermore'. 'Contribute my work experience towards the pharmacy technician' is incorrect—use 'apply my work experience toward becoming'. Use present perfect 'has always been' to express a long-held dream.