Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答总体清楚，有主题句并给出原因，但存在语法和用词不准确（如时态与介词），部分句子冗长且信息重复。建议使用更简洁自然的句子，注意时态一致，用更具体例子支持兴趣点，并尽量控制在最多5个句子内。可练习把动机和具体经历分成两句并使用连接词如“because”或“so”。

Exemplo: I'm currently a law student in China because I'm fascinated by how legal systems shape society. Studying law is challenging but rewarding, since I enjoy analyzing real cases and understanding the judges' reasoning. For example, a contract dispute I studied showed me how legal principles affect people's lives.

Sugestão: 回答包含地点和工作内容，但句子太长且结构混乱，时态和介词使用不当（例如“in the form law”应改为“in the field of law”）。建议分两句说明地点和主要职责，使用准确短语并补充一两个具体任务以增加信息量。

Exemplo: Although I'm a student, I do part-time work in Wuxi, Jiangsu Province in the field of law. I assist with administrative tasks and conduct legal research, such as preparing case summaries and searching for relevant precedents.

Sugestão: 回答明确且积极，但句子有语法错误和略显冗长（例如缺少连词或定语从句标点）。建议把长句拆成两句，注意主谓一致与连接词，补充一到两个具体例子说明为何是好地方（如某次培训）。

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. The company has a positive atmosphere and friendly colleagues. For example, they organize regular team-building events and training workshops, which help me learn teamwork and improve my practical skills.

Sugestão: 回答清晰且有具体原因，结构良好，但有小的表达错误（如“the supervisor of me”应为“my supervisor”）。建议微调措辞并在一句话中加入一个具体例子来展示支持如何提升技能。

Exemplo: Yes, definitely, because my supervisor is very supportive and teaches me how to conduct legal research and analyze cases step by step. For instance, she reviewed my first case summary and gave detailed feedback that improved my research and confidence.

Sugestão: 回答直接并表达了动机与目标，但存在小语法错误（如“help more people that in need”应为“people who are in need”或“people in need”），且内容有些重复。建议简化陈述并提供具体领域或想帮助的对象以增强说服力。

Exemplo: My future plan is to become a lawyer because I'm interested in how the legal system affects society. I hope to work in public interest law to help people in need, such as low-income clients who cannot afford legal advice.

× I'm now a student studying in law in China.

✓ I'm currently a law student in China.

句子中的时态本身可以，但表达有些冗长或不自然，建议用更地道的现在时表达“currently a law student”。简体中文解释：句子应使用现在时的自然表达，把“studying in law”改为“a law student”更简洁明了。

× I choose this field because I have been fascinated by how the legal systems work and their impact on society.

✓ I chose this field because I have long been fascinated by how legal systems work and their impact on society.

原句时态混用：主句用一般现在时“choose”，而从句用现在完成进行时“have been fascinated”，语义上表示过去开始并延续到现在，应使用过去式或现在完成完成更自然。简体中文解释：把“choose”改为过去式“chose”或将时间状语调整为“have long been fascinated”更符合时间逻辑。

× It's challenging but really rewarding, especially when I start to analyze the real cases and understand the reasoning before.

✓ It's challenging but really rewarding, especially when I start to analyze real cases and understand the reasoning behind them.

原句中“start to analyze”与“understand”搭配可以，但“before”用法不正确，应为“behind them”表示“案件背后的推理”。简体中文解释：将“before”替换为“behind them”，并去掉冠词“the”使表达更自然。

× I'm now a student studying in law, however I usually do some part time works in the form law in the Jiangsu province of Wuxi where I help with some administrative works and legal researches to gain more experience while I was a student.

✓ I'm currently a law student; however, I usually do some part-time work at a law firm in Wuxi, Jiangsu, where I help with administrative tasks and legal research to gain more experience while I'm studying.

句子结构混乱，时态不一致（末尾用过去时“was a student”与前文现在时冲突），词汇使用错误（“part time works”，“in the form law”，“legal researches”）。简体中文解释：把时态统一为现在时，把“part-time work”“law firm”“administrative tasks”“legal research”改为正确短语，并用分号或连词连接句子，避免时态混用。

× The company I work has a positive work environment and all my colleagues are friendly and they always organize different kinds of team building activities and training workshops make it easier to cooperate with others.

✓ The company I work for has a positive work environment, and all my colleagues are friendly; they always organize different kinds of team-building activities and training workshops, which make it easier to cooperate with others.

缺少介词“for”（work for a company），并且句子缺少连词或关系词来连接从句，且“make it easier”需要有先行词。简体中文解释：添加“for”，使用非限定性定语或关系词“which”来连接，使句子结构完整，同时将“team building”改为连字符形式更规范。

× Yes, definitely, because the supervisor of me is very friendly and always teaches me how to conduct the legal research and analyze the cases step by step.

✓ Yes, definitely, because my supervisor is very friendly and always teaches me how to conduct legal research and analyze cases step by step.

“the supervisor of me”用法不正确，应使用所有格“my supervisor”；“the legal research”和“the cases”在此处不需要定冠词。简体中文解释：把“of me”改为所有格“my”，去掉不必要的定冠词，使表达更地道。

× This support has helped me gain more practical skills and confidence.

✓ This support has helped me gain more practical skills and confidence.

该句语法正确，无需修改。简体中文解释：句子使用现在完成时表达过去影响现在的结果，结构正确、清晰。

× My future plan is to be a lawyer because I have always been fascinated by how the legal system works and the impact on the society.

✓ My future plan is to become a lawyer because I have always been fascinated by how the legal system works and its impact on society.

“be”在这里可更自然地用“不定式to become”；“the impact on the society”中定冠词和“the society”不恰当，应为“its impact on society”。简体中文解释：用“become”替代“be”，把“the society”改为“society”并改用物主代词“its”。

× I want to help more people that in need.

✓ I want to help more people who are in need.

关系代词错误：应使用“who”指人，并补全动词“are”。简体中文解释：把“that”改为“who”并加上“are”构成完整的定语从句，语法正确且清晰。