Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Câu trả lời của bạn khá đầy đủ nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng chưa chính xác, ví dụ như 'friendly' cần được bổ sung danh từ đi kèm để rõ nghĩa hơn. Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

Exemplo: My hometown is a small village in Aden province, located in central Vietnam. It is a peaceful rural area where most people work in farming. I love it because of its beautiful natural scenery and friendly people.

Sugestão: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'peaceful atmospheres' nên là 'peaceful atmosphere', 'airs' nên là 'air', và câu chưa hoàn chỉnh gây khó hiểu. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

Exemplo: What I like most about my hometown is its peaceful atmosphere. It is a quiet and relaxing place, perfect for unwinding after stressful days. The air feels fresh, and the streets are calm, which is very different from the busy city life.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp như thì động từ không đúng ('start seeing' nên là 'started attending', 'I be back' nên là 'I go back'). Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đơn cho các sự kiện đã xảy ra và câu hoàn chỉnh để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

Exemplo: I lived there for almost 18 years. I moved to Danang about 10 years ago when I started attending university. Sometimes, when I have free time, I go back to visit my hometown.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời bị ngắt quãng và có lỗi ngữ pháp như 'there's is not many' nên là 'there are not many', 'after graduated' nên là 'after graduation'. Bạn nên hoàn thành câu và sử dụng cấu trúc ngữ pháp chính xác để câu trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn.

Exemplo: Not really, because there are not many schools or universities in my hometown for young people to develop their education and careers after graduation. Therefore, most young people move to bigger cities to find better opportunities.

× I really love my hometown because of its beautiful natural scenery and friendly.

✓ I really love my hometown because of its beautiful natural scenery and friendly people.

The adjective 'friendly' is used without a noun, which makes the sentence incomplete. Adding the noun 'people' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence.

× Well, I love most about the peaceful atmospheres in my hometown.

✓ Well, what I love most is the peaceful atmosphere in my hometown.

The phrase 'love most about' is incorrect; it should be 'what I love most is'. Also, 'atmospheres' should be singular 'atmosphere' because it refers to the general feeling of the place.

× It is a quiet and relaxing which is a perfect place to unwind after stressful days.

✓ It is quiet and relaxing, which is a perfect place to unwind after stressful days.

The sentence is missing a noun after 'quiet and relaxing'. Removing 'a' and adding a comma before 'which' corrects the sentence structure.

× The airs feel fresh, streets are calm like most lower pace which is different from.

✓ The air feels fresh, and the streets are calm with a slower pace, which is different from the city.

'Airs' should be singular 'air'. 'Most lower pace' is incorrect; it should be 'a slower pace'. The sentence is incomplete and needs clarification at the end.

× I lived there for almost 18 years.

✓ I have lived there for almost 18 years.

Since the speaker is referring to a period up to the present, the present perfect tense 'have lived' is appropriate instead of simple past 'lived'.

× I moved to Danang when I start seeing my university about 10 years ago.

✓ I moved to Danang when I started attending university about 10 years ago.

The verb 'start' should be in the past tense 'started' to match the past time reference. Also, 'seeing my university' is incorrect; 'attending university' is the correct phrase.

× Sometime when I have free time, I be back to visit it.

✓ Sometimes when I have free time, I go back to visit it.

'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes'. 'I be back' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'I go back'.

× Not really because there's is not many schools or universities there for the young people to develop their education and also the career after graduated.

✓ Not really, because there are not many schools or universities there for young people to develop their education and also their careers after graduation.

'There's is' is incorrect; it should be 'there are'. 'Many' requires plural noun 'schools or universities'. 'After graduated' should be 'after graduation'.

× So most of the young people here they move to a.

✓ So most of the young people here move to other cities.

The pronoun 'they' is redundant after 'most of the young people here'. The sentence is incomplete and needs a proper ending.