Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer provides useful information but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise, and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, correct the geographical description and improve sentence structure for naturalness.

Exemplo: My hometown is Nanning, the capital city of Guangxi province in southern China. It is nicknamed the 'Green City' because of its abundant trees and flowers, and it enjoys a mild climate year-round.

Sugestão: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical mistakes. To improve, provide a clear topic sentence, support it with specific reasons, and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid incomplete sentences and be more precise.

Exemplo: I love my hometown mainly because the people are very friendly and always willing to help others. Additionally, the city has many beautiful parks and natural scenery, which makes it a pleasant place to live.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Focus on giving a direct response with clear sentence structure. Avoid filler words and incomplete thoughts. Provide specific details about your living duration and experiences.

Exemplo: I have lived in Nanning for about 27 years since it is my birthplace. However, I spent seven years living elsewhere for work and study.

Sugestão: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. To improve, give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons using linking words. Complete your thoughts and avoid abrupt endings.

Exemplo: Nanning can be a good place for young people, especially if they have family there, because the cost of living is lower than in other cities. However, for those seeking more job opportunities, bigger cities might be better.

× My hometown is Nanning, the capital city of Guangxi province, uh, which is a northern city of in China and it's called Green City as his nickname 'cause it has a lot of trees and flowers.

✓ My hometown is Nanning, the capital city of Guangxi province, uh, which is a northern city in China and it's called Green City as its nickname 'cause it has a lot of trees and flowers.

The preposition 'of' is incorrectly used before 'in China'. The correct preposition to indicate location within a country is 'in'. Also, 'his nickname' should be 'its nickname' because the city is an object, not a person.

× Major reason is the people there is very friendly and they are very outgoing to help people so I just wanna stay there.

✓ The major reason is the people there are very friendly and they are very outgoing to help people so I just wanna stay there.

The subject 'people' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× The secondly there are many beautiful.

✓ Secondly, there are many beautiful places.

The phrase 'The secondly' is incorrect; 'Secondly' is the correct adverb to indicate sequence. Also, 'many beautiful' is incomplete; it needs a noun such as 'places' to complete the meaning.

× Well, see, uh, because nothing is my birth place, so I live there for about. 27 years, but I have seven years our density because I walk and study in.

✓ Well, since it is my birthplace, I have lived there for about 27 years, but I have spent seven years elsewhere because I work and study there.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Nothing is my birth place' is incorrect; it should be 'it is my birthplace'. 'I have seven years our density' is unclear and likely a mistranslation; it is corrected to 'I have spent seven years elsewhere'. Also, 'walk and study in' is unclear and corrected to 'work and study there' for clarity.

× Well, it depends if the young people have the family there, it's cheap for them to live in Nanning because the price there is cheaper than other cities.

✓ Well, it depends on whether the young people have family there; it's cheap for them to live in Nanning because the prices there are lower than in other cities.

The phrase 'depends if' should be 'depends on whether' for correct conjunction usage. Also, 'the family' should be 'family' without 'the' as it is uncountable here. 'Price' should be plural 'prices' and 'cheaper than other cities' is better expressed as 'lower than in other cities'.