Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct small grammar mistakes. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition (e.g., "it it's"). Also correct phrase order ("comes from Spanish" → "comes from Spanish and means ‘good view’").

Exemplo: I come from Buena Vista, Augusta del Norte, in the northern part of the Caraga region. The town’s name comes from Spanish and means “good view,” which suits it well because it overlooks scenic hills and the coast.

Sugestão: Make the response more structured: start with a clear main idea, then give one or two specific examples using linking words (for example, or also). Remove hesitations and repeated phrases. Use precise vocabulary ("accessible" not repeated).

Exemplo: I love the easy access to nature. For example, I can drive a few minutes to the nearest beach to enjoy the ocean breeze, and I can also reach nearby mountains quickly for hiking.

Sugestão: Use correct tense and focus on relevant details. Begin with a clear time statement, then add one concise supporting detail if useful. Remove irrelevant or confusing details (the hospital location is unnecessary unless asked).

Exemplo: I have lived in Buena Vista for almost 28 years — I was born here and have lived here ever since. (If relevant) My parents still live nearby, about a 30-minute drive away.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion then support it with two specific, well-expressed examples. Use correct vocabulary ("children's parks", "oval track") and avoid trailing off. Add a brief explanation why these facilities matter.

Exemplo: Yes — it’s a great place for young people because there are many parks and children’s play areas. For instance, we have a large outdoor oval track where young people can run and cycle safely, which encourages exercise and social activities.

× I live in Buena Vista, Augusta del Norte, it's the northern part of Caraga region.

✓ I live in Buena Vista, Augusta del Norte; it's in the northern part of the Caraga region.

Use of prepositions and articles: say 'in the northern part' and include the definite article 'the' before 'Caraga region'. Also join the two independent clauses correctly with a semicolon or period rather than a comma splice. Suggestion: use 'in the northern part of the Caraga region' and separate clauses properly.

× From its name Buena Vista it it's it comes from Spanish and it means good view which fits because the area has its nice scenery.

✓ From its name, Buena Vista comes from Spanish and means 'good view', which fits because the area has very nice scenery.

Sentence contains redundant words and incorrect word order ('it it's it comes'). Remove extra pronouns and simplify verb structure: 'Buena Vista comes from Spanish and means...' Use commas to set off introductory phrase and the clause 'which fits'. Replace 'its nice scenery' with 'very nice scenery' for natural phrasing.

× I like it because I have all the access to nature, for example if I wanted to have a nice breeze of the ocean, so I just go to the nearest beach place and whenever I wanted also to be in a mountain it's already it's also accessible.

✓ I like it because I have easy access to nature. For example, if I want the nice ocean breeze, I just go to the nearest beach, and if I want to be in the mountains, they are also accessible.

Multiple structure and tense problems: 'have all the access' is unnatural; use 'easy access'. Maintain present tense to match general statements ('if I want' rather than 'if I wanted'). Remove filler words and redundant phrases ('it's already it's also'). Split into two sentences for clarity. Use plural 'mountains' and simple present for habitual facts.

× Oh, I live here since I was born, for almost 28 years now.

✓ Oh, I have lived here since I was born; it's been almost 28 years now.

Use present perfect for actions that started in the past and continue to the present: 'have lived' and the time expression 'since I was born'. Also 'it's been almost 28 years' is the natural way to express duration. Avoid mixing simple present 'I live' with 'since'.

× So my mother and father gave birth at an hospital.

✓ My mother gave birth to me at a hospital.

Preposition and article errors: 'gave birth at an hospital' is incorrect because 'gave birth' should be followed by 'to' the baby, and 'an hospital' should be 'a hospital' (use 'a' before consonant sound). Also 'my mother and father gave birth' is wrong because only the mother gives birth; correct to 'My mother gave birth to me'.

× And yeah, ever since I was born, I live here.

✓ And yeah, ever since I was born, I have lived here.

Again, use present perfect 'have lived' for a situation that started in the past and continues now. 'I live here' with 'ever since' is inconsistent with the time expression.

× We have a lot of parks and children parks.

✓ We have a lot of parks and children's parks.

Article/possessive form: 'children parks' is incorrect; use the possessive 'children's parks'. 'A lot of parks' is fine. Suggestion: use 'children's parks' or 'playgrounds'.

× Also we have an outdoor Oval truck for them to run around and do cycling around the area and.

✓ We also have an outdoor oval track where they can run and cycle around the area.

Multiple errors: 'Oval truck' is a wrong word choice (should be 'oval track'), 'an outdoor' should be followed by a noun without capitalising 'Oval', and the sentence ends with an extra conjunction 'and'. Use 'where they can' to introduce the purpose and 'run and cycle' for parallel verbs. Remove trailing 'and'.